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Hey Baezel! First Thoughts: Let's see. This is something pretty unique! I like that you used prose to show the fight scene since it gives you quite a few chances ...

Hi Lauren! First Thoughts: To begin with, I like the way that you dropped the reader in this world. I'm happy without a prologue to tell the reader how exactly ...

Hey, there Elysian! First Thoughts: Let's see. I like the first burst of action in this chapter, and I'm happy to see the plot progress in the view of the ...

Hi there Emma! Thanks for requesting a review, and I’m sorry it took this long! I hope this helps a little. First Thoughts: So, this is kind of like “be ...

Hey Radrook! First off, I like the formatting of the couplets, but the single/double spaces look a little flipped, since the first two pairs have a single space in between, ...

Hey there Kanome! Finally got around to a little free time, so here I am to review this work! First Thoughts: I'm a sucker for anything in third person, especially ...

Hey! This review is coming to you from Team Red Dawn on this lovely Review Day. I'm sorry that I haven't read previous chapters of this since the ideas in ...

Hey! I’m happy you updated. First Thoughts I’m a sucker for misunderstood, angry characters, and I am not disappointed in this Sebastian! I already like him a lot more than ...

Hey Lightsong! Thanks for requesting a review, and I hope this helps! First Thoughts Although I haven't read any of the chapters, this is a really interesting premise. Academy-based stories ...

Hey there Radrook! I just wanted to say a few things about this poem of yours. First off, congratulations on your extensive vocabulary, but I think that's a reason for ...

Hi elysian! Thanks for requesting a review, and I hope this helps! First Thoughts I like this idea. Stories playing on what happens after death is a topic that never ...

Hey there! Thanks for requesting a review, and I hope this helps! So, right away, there’s something I’d like to point out. That introduction isn’t needed, really at all. If ...

Hi there! Thanks for the request, and I hope this is helpful. First off, I’d recommend you mark this as 18+ for the very last line of this piece. I ...

Hey :) So, I've been procrastinating on reviewing, cause I've had fun putting comments in NaPo threads, but alright, I'll do something finally XD. I may have had to look ...

Hello there! I'm here to give you a few pointers on this poem. First off, I don't really get the opening before the poem itself. I guess I just don't ...