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This is a nice poem. You did good on the stanzas and the rhyming. :) Keep up the good work.

As the others have said, I really liked the poem. You're good at expressing your feelings and emotions, etc. Keep up the awesome writing

I liekd this poem. If I had wrote it I would have put that I avoid work on my computer, and skip onto YWS. HAHA. You did a good job! ...

I'm reading as I sit here eating Whopper Robin Eggs..mmm chocolate...anyway..here's the few grammar points I noticed: Mommy, come quick!!” Jay You only need one exclamation point. Two is no ...

You wrote a very good poem. I don't see any grammar mistakes. It kept me reading so it was very interesting. Keep up the good work. I think anyone could ...

Thanks, no it's meant to be lower case on the frist quote and on the second, maybe I need a comma? No they didn't kiss, she was going to kiss ...

This is a pretty cool poem! I like to see your poems. I don't have any negative feedback for you. I like the descriptions and how you rhymed it.

You did really well on this poem. I didn't notice any grammar mistakes to point out. If there were - I didn't see them. I'm following you . I hope ...

It seems like it's flowing fast. I caught this as interesting since I'm writing a short story about a teenage boy who is a dragon. It seems interesting enough though ...

This is a very good speech. I hope to see some more work from you. Don't forget to review others' works as well! Also, welcome to YWS. 8)

Thank you so much for the reviews! I'm glad I have at least one person reading as I post the newest version. I hope I can keep this up. Work ...

I'm making the chapters shorter. Like the 2nd one will be when they leave the city for the day and return to a disaster.

I meant temporary character not a main character.

It goes pretty quick for a short story. If I read this in a magazine I'd be like....where's the rest? I like the idea you have. Grammar has already been ...

Thanks. This really helps. I think my novel just about needs re written. It's supposed to be a peaceful city but I need to change things even if it means ...