Dear, YWS

I really loved this poem.
I think you perfectly explained each and every one of us here.

It's great how you in the beginning it started out as critical as though it was ruining your life. Then, the mood changed into a thank you letter as if it were your main reason for living.

Sincerely your biggest stalker,

Hi.. Awesome poem!! I just loved it!! It was so true and something I related to... Good job.. YWS deserves this poem!! You've done a good job by writing something for it!!
Harshita:)

First of all I would like to say: "Kind of" is too grammatically correct, as is "sort of." "Would of" or "should of," however, are not. In those cases "of" should be "have" or " 've."

Anyways.

As a poem, yes, this actually is kind of bland - there's no imagery. But I can see a lot of potential imagery. Example: "My chores are never completed." There's a LOT of potential here - instead of the bland line "my chores are never completed," you could say something about moldy dishes piling up in the sink or something. There are a lot of lines in here like that - very general, vague lines that could be transformed into something amazing with the right images.

Also, there would not be a comma after "dear" - instead the comma would go after "YWS," as in "Dear YWS, thanks to you..." etc. There are a few other typos, but that one really bugged me.

Overall, though, like I said, this has a lot of potential. I think this is especially true since probably most of us on this site feel exactly this way about it. (I for one still complete my homework and do my chores, but I do love coming on this site and seeing new notifications, and it's the only site on which I really feel like I have friends even though I don't know any of them in real life. Before this site I shunned the idea of Internet friends...oh, well.)

So give this some work and let me know when you do, because I'd love to see it!

~Blue

Really witty but true nonetheless.

I no longer watch
T.V or pig out on boredom food.
I write.

With friends
and with enemies, life
feels kinda tough.

Haha... I really liked this. It was funny, but true. I've been through the everyday stalking myself, too. Like the part where you mentioned that you dreamed of being featured, but never are. I felt that way, too. Hihi... this is so cute. I'm sorry. I can't review this.

Keep writing and stalking.


Jash ♥

Yay for you! This got featured!! I've only been a member for two months now, and I got two of my poems featured recently, too, so I was very happy about that!
Any tiny mistakes I noticed were already pointed out, and the only thing otherwise I would comment on would be that sometimes you have a really long line at the end of a stanza that still fit what you were trying to say, but it just seemed out of place. Like this.

I write poetry
and make new friends
though I don't even know who most of them are.

I love how it starts off like it;s gonna be a critical poem about how YWS is making your life hard with this:

Thanks to you
I never finish my
homework.

Thanks to you
my chores are never
completed.

My poor family
is neglected and
alone.

But you YWS
have made me
a new person.

I no longer watch
T.V or pig out on boredom food
I write.

I write poetry
and make new friends
though I don't even know who most of them are.

My life is
easier with you
here.

My life began to
grow and revolve around
you, YWS.

xD I wrote about this a while ago and it got featured as well! I love it

Haha this was a sort of a reality check for me. I found myself whispering yes in agreement to pretty much all of what you said in your poem! So well done and keep it up xXx

OO

You kinda just stole my feelings about YWS right there....

Awesome job haha. Oh I believe everyone hasn't done their homework due to this awesome site at one point or another!!! Like me XD I'm suppose to looking up stuff for my debate in less than three hours XD. Oh dear, anyways this was amazing and good job on getting the featured work!!!!! You did great ^^ Good luck and Keep up the good work. Hope to see more of your work soon!!!!
Soulkana<3

With friends
and with enemies life
feels kinda tough.

Everyday I visit you
hoping to be featured
but I never am.

hey!
I love your poem. It's also my story in so many ways, my family is also deprived of my attention, I watch less and less T.V. everyday, I never did my homework before too, so that didn't change, I never complete chores on time, I've made tons of new friends and I am falling in love with YWS too.
It really gave me a platform to display my before neglected work, helped me in improving my writing skills and all in all it gave me a reason to write...
Thanks for sharing this amazing piece....

I just have to say I love this poem. It's just what I needed to read after a long day. Congratulations on having a fetured poem. That's all Keep up the great work!

Thanks everyone!!!!! I'm soo grateful and happy! I'm featured my very first time, thanks for all you comments and likes! You're all amazing!
Peace,
Snickerdooly

well it's featured now! isn't it?
any way i love love love it! good choice, it fits me too perfectly! i laugh it out loud while reading cause it was funny and simple, but very cute

keep up and update with more pieces!
don't worry it will be featured too

Haha. I liked this. It was really funny. And I needed a laugh. And what you said is so true. I think my moms has figured out i havent been actually doing my homework...heehee..so i feel ya. Good luck. Happy Writing!!

Very, very good!!! You put into words the exact same feelings that I have!!!!

You're featured now =]]

I liekd this poem. If I had wrote it I would have put that I avoid work on my computer, and skip onto YWS. HAHA. You did a good job! Keep up the great work!

Hi!

This is wondeful, and it was me not too long ago, though I havent been on in a while.. :/ The errors have been pointed out. But I just wanted to say that you get a "like" from me! I had my first piece featured on here a few weeks ago.. and I haven't been a member as long as some people. I know how happy ot made me, so I'm hoping this will be featured so you can know the 'happy camper' state I was in.

God Bless,
Amber

Oh my gosh in loved this!!!!! I actually laughed out loud while reading it. This poem fits me (and probably a lot of other people) perfectly. Every time I open the internet this is the first place I come...I even asked my school advisor to unlock this site so I could go on during my study halls! I did not find any edits, so you just get praise from me! It was simply wonderful, and I hope it gets featured! You get a like from me!

-Jessa

P.S. I don't think this is bland either :]

I loved this! It was funny, and just about everyone here can relate. I haven't even been a member for a week and already I've neglected most of the things in your poem (-cough- my father was not happy about the chores...). But the point is, this was simply amazing. The small mistakes have already been pointed out, so I have nothing left to say.

...."Kind of" is not grammatically correct. (Neither is "kinda", but it can be excused as slang, in my opinion.)

And it's "you're busy" not "your busy".

And I totally agree with pretty much everything here.

And I don't think it's bland.

This is really funny =D I liked reading it. Everyone should like it so you get a feature!! =)

I like the point of the poem, but it is kind of bland. I only noticed one mistake however,

With friends
and with enemies life
feels kinda tough.