katchaerin

Hey there. I like your plot. The holocaust... Anyways, although you tried to write your story in 100% dialogue, it's still confusing. XD I'm not saying you should change it. ...

Hey there! When that feeling tries to come, I beg you to push it awayOr else it will eat at you day after dayYou’ll yell and you’ll cry, making a ...

Hey there! I would just like to say that this is quite good! Simple and direct. XD Daddy is always working.Mummy is always with Bobby. So Jodie pours and pours. ...

Hey there! Splendid job! XD I loved how you described Love at first, then the point when love seemed to fade, then appear again. Then love comes again Like being ...

Hey there! I loved the poem - how cimple and direct it is. He loves her and she loves him But they’re tired of the pain So they don’t tell ...

Everyone will fall in love. Fact. Love is unconditional. Fact. You will find love in the most unlikely places. Fact. These three facts used to get me through the day. ...

Hey there! I like it. It's simple and it's cute. I agree with SporkPunk with errors on punctuation, but other than that, it's good. Maybe you could let us know ...

Hey there! I like this. However, something lacks in here. I guess it lacks the story-reader connection. You should add action. There was a monster right in front of me. ...

WOW. I love this. Poor man. He's dead and his wife thinks he cheated. But still, poor woman. She thinks her husband left them, then she learns he's dead. Well, ...

WONDERFUL! SIMPLY WONDERFUL! I feel for your MC. It must be really hard to be in her shoes. Her parents sure aren't acting like parents. It was written well. After ...

Hey there, card dragon. XD It was nice having able to tell a story in a story. I like it. It seems like you're writing this for the young ones. ...

Hey, there! Welcome to YWS! Nice piece of work. XD You're good, and I love it. I loved how you delivered the story. But just a few nitpickers: “No,” sob ...

Wonderful piece of work. XD I made up my mind long ago, Rissa. It was my choice to make the bond. One life is a small price to pay for ...

Hey silentpages! Great work. XD You definitely brought me to another world. Fairytales always tell about happy mermaids and stuff, but you did the opposite. Awh, how sad it is ...

Hey there! So, this is a true story? T-T I could hardly imagine how hard it is for the MC to get through these things. Oh well, I would just ...