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I started to read and I had to look at the title again because I forgot what you were talking about. Good ideas though. It changes the way you think ...

Ok here I am. Just so you know I bolded parts in certain paragraphs and then explain them below which is also bolded. If something didn't bold right I apologize. ...

wasn't bad. Uh I can't critique poems but you asked. I like the idea of like how it like summer then winter cause of the sun and the snow. Good ...

When Nate gives his long speach right before they charge the noobs is like a total Lord of the Rings moment. Which is only one reason why I liked it. ...

I felt that this was very good. It does feel a little repetive but most lyrics do. It does seem as if you have two choruses: "just give me the ...

I liked the poem I thought it flowed well overall but there was one spot in the middle where it sounded a little awkward when read a loud (most likely ...

Haha... I liked this you definitely got your message across. Now I definitely know who not to ask when I want a critique. Just kidding!! The rythem was good and ...

And a note to all future critiquers- Feel free to be harsh. Ooo... I should have fun with this! ~~~~~~~~~~~[/color] Chapter 1 Kerani , of Shira , watched the dry, ...

I already critiqued this like a month ago before your mom made you take it off. It's somewhere around here. Sorry In_the_Moonlight but I don't have time to go through ...

hey you critique my story so much I figured it was time I returned the favor. I read part one just so I know what is going on Comments in ...

I have a few things to say... 1) You captured the story better then I did. By the way I'm gonna post mine tonight. 2)Good idea. You know what mines ...

interesting, P.s: sorry is very short. dont worry about it being short your interpretation was really good i might show this to one of my friends on YWS she like ...

interesting but it kind of made me think of a book that we had to read for school the book was called the Midwife's Apprentice i think your story isnt ...

wow you must of put alot of time into this what possessed you to do it? how long did it take you to do it? im not sure if there ...

Edited to add: Sry i didnt do any critiquing, someone pointed that out... everything you said is correct you might want to seperate some parts of your entry so you ...