Published April 4, 2008
This is based in the picture number three from this post: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic27296.html
P.s: sorry is very short.
"I feel alone, where is everybody? I am scared", said the little flame, burning slowly the candle. "Is somebody here? I feel as the unique in this world", said, spreading tears of fire.
Nobody anwered him... so he continued to burning the white candle alone.
As it was burning, the little flame turned off when the white candle was gone.... rest in peace.
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Interesting, poor thing...
I was expecting the flame to start to cry flames and set his surroundings on fire, but I like this ending better.
The thought of being alone in the world.
Chicken Soup for the soul has got people thinking all writing should be happy.
interesting,
dont worry about it being short
your interpretation was really good i might show this to one of my friends on YWS
she like to write things like this
there's nothing to critique cause this was very good
were you able to enter it in the contest or no?