jujubean05

ummm ok

wow that was really good. I'm jealous you can do that off the top of your head!! lol... Thanks!!!!!

I revised it, but I don't think it is any better. Please comment your oppinion.

Thanks. I enjoy writing short stories more. It's like a mini movie inside my head that only I can write down. You know what I mean?? plus I can use ...

I fixed your two suggestions. I changed then slightly from what you said. Since you have read both, which do you prefer my peoms or my short story??

True I write short stories, but they have mostly been for school. My teachers didn't give them back, so I don't have them. I will post some of my short ...

Thanks. Your comments have really helped me. My writing is off a lot. I love writing. IT is my passion, but I'm have trouble with the feel and rhymes of ...

I really liked this poem. My favorite part was the last line. I like the way you phrased it.

Thanks you guys I'll repost this popem soon after I revise it! Thanks for you alll the help!!!! :)

Loved.. Loved.. Loved it. I was really good. :D

I love any books that have been written by L.J. Smith. I think she is the bomb!! :D

I really liked it!

I felt sad as I was reading it, but I think that someone out there has felt this way. You captured that very well. Keep writing. You are really good.

I loved this poem. I couldn't stop reading it over and over. Another thing thanks for critiquing my first poem on YWS. I needed it!! :D

Thanks for those comments. I'm really working on my poetry. I love writing. I just didn't know if I should post my more depressing poems. I will try harder to ...