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Thank you for the review, you are right in that days was supposed to be he's. I didn't mean to make it feel rushed but rather Lamar laying down the ...

Thank you for the feed back. I am glad that you read it and if you haven't read the previous chapters it would be great if you could and give ...

When I read this I interpreted his "children" to be literal and that's why he was making swords and writing to "Men of steel and men of power" He was ...

It was supposed to be says. I didn't catch it when I read back over it before posting. I would love it if you read the previous chapters if you ...

Thank you for the review, it always helps to get comments and feedback. I know that the lines you pointed out are longer than the others and stick out but ...

Thanks so much for the review. The thing about the question mark is that I didn't put it in. My word document automatically put it in and I just didn't ...

I agree that a person has a right to his opinion but I also think that monsters should find a better way to express himself. Also don't forget this is ...

Thanks so much, this really helps me feel better about the writing. i really enjoy hearing the responses to my writing.

that makes sense, it's a good restart, and your welcome

Thanks for the review. I started out with only that first paragraph and expected to write something akin to a poem but when I started expanding it turned into novel ...

Yea, once I finished this chapter I immediately started and finished the 8th chapter but I am waiting till the cost decreases to post it. Once that's done, I am ...

Okay, I see where you were getting at, and your welcome. I hope it came off more helpful than rude.

Thanks I see where it could be confusing so I don't think it's just you but I figured that the confusion made people want to read farther. I haven't looked ...

I like where you are going with this. I think that one thing that would benefit you is slowing down a little and paying attention to spelling. I noticed five ...

Yea once I get chapter 7 ended the rest should flow better. Just to warn you chapter 7 is a little on the long side.