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Re: Another Ced/Star make-out scene
hahahaha good description, the characters are really realistic, and i like that its about homosexuals because I feel like society is just sweeping them under the rug for no one ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: The Sun
wow this was really good, what a clever way to describe the sun! it was fantastic imagery, great work! it was really deep if one dares to look below the ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Hero
GREAT flow. GREAT rhythm. GREAT rhyme. GREAT context. GREAT POEM! ten out of ten! I couldn't find any mistakes or things i didn't like. I got sucked in from the ...
Jul 14, 2010 -
Re: Prolouge
ok, my problem with this is that it is just too unbelievable. that really puts people off stories. 564 people survived the radiation and bomb. how did they survive? why ...
Jun 15, 2010 -
Re: .
wow! this had me hooked right from the start and it didn't disappoint me at the end. it had wonderful rhythm and clever rhyme. Who can I turn to; where ...
Jun 15, 2010 -
Re: You, I Love
awww this was really nice and sweet. Triggered by your words, That I deserve to hear when i read this line, all i thought was why does this person deserve ...
Jun 10, 2010 -
Re: A Midnight Walk Through Zombie Park: Chapter One
wooo! go horror stories! jackle here as requested. i really liked this, i've always been a sucker for the zombie stuff. i agree with everything the previous reviewers said, especially ...
May 31, 2010 -
Re: Alone I Stand: Chapter One
hi this seems like a good start! I screamed, and he covered my mouth with his grubby, dirty hand grubby and dirty mean basically the same thing and using them ...
May 31, 2010 -
Re: Oliver - Prologue
I am not a good person, but at least I’m not you. haha i love this line. the whole thing was pretty good but you could spice it up a ...
Apr 13, 2010 -
Re: Unknown Incidence (1)
Ok... there's not a lot of material here. Is this a whole chapter? because it's a little short and uneventful. first chapters should hook the reader, and this just didn't. ...
Apr 13, 2010 -
Re: Zombie Attack
Hi real cool :D i just found a few spelling mistakes that i've corrected here for you... your bellies torn open you're ripped limb from limb the zombies move closer ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Broken..
i agree with what hannah said. i dont know what else to say about this, but don't take that in a bad way. i noticed something though... Their There is ...
Mar 31, 2010 -
Re: Bluffing - Chapter 1, 2 & 3
awesome. When i saw how long it was i thought there's no way i'm getting through all of this but then i just got addicted. I've read the fourth chapter ...
Mar 29, 2010 -
Re: Yours Truly (Edited)
this was really beautiful, and i know everyone's been saying that but i absolutely loved it. however and your perfect cheeky ears; i just don't know if ears can be ...
Mar 26, 2010 -
Re: Music
hey this was pretty cool but the rhyming sounded a bit forced and the end was totally random, not that there's anything wrong with random. remember, in poetry it doesn't ...
Mar 23, 2010
