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keawriting Review

This poem is amazing. I really like your writing style.
Don't think I can mention and thing "wrong" with it, except as mentioned above.
Otherwise its perfect.
Can't wait to read some more of your work! :D

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getalifeashley Comment

About reviewing : I know, and starting tomorrow I'm forcing myself to write some reviews. They'll probably be not so great though

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jackle
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jackle wrote a review · Tue Jun 15, 2010 4:40 am

wow! this had me hooked right from the start and it didn't disappoint me at the end. it had wonderful rhythm and clever rhyme.

Who can I turn to; where do I go?
When nobody needs me, who will ever know?
I'm at the point where I cannot stand,
So show me the door, or please, take my hand.

this is definitely my favourite stanza :D
Sooner or later, we will have to face
the fears and the horrors we tried to replace.

i think this would be better as sooner or later, we all have to face but i dunno, that's just me.
well done!
-jackle
ps. you should do more reviews or people wont review your work

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Way2Dawn
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Another great poem Ash I can see a few people relating to it so I believe it was a great subject to write poetry on. The flow was a bit rocky towards the end but the start was good a engaging.
Keep it up and I look forward to future work!
-Dawn



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