The Sun

by Mirasol

Published November 15, 2011

In poems

Lanky, long limbs
cradling the air,
warming it with body heat.

Fine, fair fingers
exploring the earth,
shedding light upon discoveries.

Ecstatic, expansive eyesight
watching over every soul,
uplifts spirits and grants smiles.

Valiant, vibrant voice
singing silent songs
allowing the continuation of life.

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ZombieSquirrel wrote a review Review · Nov 15, 2011

First of all, I am JELOUS! I wish I had written that hahahaha xD

"Ecstatic, expansive eyesightwatching over every soul,uplifts spirits and grants smiles."

That part leaped off the screen and smacked me in the face with a wet towel. The shortness didn't bother me at all, I thought it was straight up and honest, I like the honesty a lot. Very impressive mate. Keep it up :D

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jackle wrote a review Review · Nov 15, 2011

wow this was really good, what a clever way to describe the sun! it was fantastic imagery, great work! it was really deep if one dares to look below the surface of the words themselves.

Fine, fair fingers
exploring the earth,
shedding light upon discoveries.

this was my favourite part!

Hope to see you around, I'd love to read more of your work

-Jackle

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PollarBear14 commented Comment · Nov 15, 2011

Very very nice. I don't have time to review now but I really like this. You are talented.



Life, although it may only be an accumulation of anguish, is dear to me, and I will defend it.
— Mary Shelley, Frankenstein