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Hey TenYo, I really liked this piece. Before I start talking about it, let me first show you some things that you should take a second look at, which will ...

Nice, I enjoyed the rhythm of this one. The short, brisk lines work well with this topic, I feel. One thing though: "Who knows what happens when we die, Do ...

Ha ha, I like this poem, especially its ending. Personally, I'm not a poetic guy, so I don't think you'll find my critique on rhythm or meter reliable. So instead, ...

She wants to run away from it all, but she still hits trees because she doesn't know where she's going with life. She wants independence; growing up means more responsibilities ...

Hey, beemarie425! Welcome to YMS. You know, most people on this site are going to be like, "I don't like the way you formatted this poem. Can you make all ...

Hola amigo, let me take a peeksy at what you got here. Alright, first, here's the itty gritty: Shall we run away, in to the distance? Take out the comma. ...

Hey WaterVyper, welcome to YMS. I see that this is your first work here, and I have to admit, it's pretty good. Here are some technical mistakes that I corrected: ...

I think this chapter is well structured. You did a good job creating a tense atmosphere in the first part. Taylor and her Anglo-Germanic-Spanish hybrid mumblings are hilarious! Taylor was ...

Wow. I think its the imagery that really makes this poem stand out. The eyes the speaker is describing is majestic and intimidating at the same time. Bittersweet, the weight ...

Hey nice job! This one nicely captures the optimism and uncertainty of love, and it deserves a thorough edit: It starts with a smile Then grows to a kiss , ...

Hey Moon, I thought it was really good. It's really optimistic and cheery. Even when as it gets sadder at the end, the optimism is still there, as if she'll ...

Nice story you have going on in here, I can't wait for the next part! Here is my critique (aren't you lucky?): I hate our twenty-something-year-old , too happy math ...

Wow, this is emotionally intense. This is probably the best "lament for one's lost love" poem I've ever read. You have good style and your imagery is good, but there's ...

Wow, this is really great. I'm a sucker for love and romance, so I might be biased when I say that I like this poem. But I think you should ...

I personally enjoy short, simple poems. This one is pretty straight forward, but it does have the potential to be more. If you wish, you may consider extending it and ...