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Stumble into the cold bathroom, distressed; tired from today. My reflection stares down into me. Fierce. Hard eyes give everything away. Love this stanza! So much character and I can ...

I loved you ironic phrase that you repeated (with variation)! "How do I show this dark beauty?" Pretty cool subject overall, no mistakes in grammar/spelling. The couplet at the end ...

OK, so, couple nitpicks: "soft like" in line six. I think some punctuation would clear it up because I don't know if you mean "soft-like" or "soft, like..." And in ...

Awesome poem! Ok so I loved the first line, and the use of "hair-raising." I did not like "billion," it was phonetically annoying. I would recommend replacing it with "trillion." ...

Your grammar and spelling are fine and consistent. I was confused though by the sudden shift in the tone and content of the poem. In the first half it is ...

OK so "others" should have an apostrophe because it's possessive. Everything else was brilliant! This poem is just phenomenal. The flow, repetition, structure, etc. Just really pulled me in and ...

This poem seems like it's a first draft, which is not necessarily a bad thing because of the nature of this site, but I hope you don't consider this a ...

I love your poem. It is clean and well presented. I loved these lines: "(Down a block from Alpha and Omega and to the left towards Christianity)" The humor and ...

I liked your poem but some poetic descriptions of the sanctuary and your heart might serve it well. Somehow try to make the poem more than the sum of its ...

"But I have choices..." This lines was awesome! Just the simple wording, and the way it came like a declaration of resolve mixed with sadness and curiosity. I think if ...

Neat poem. It is like you said a little thought (about a big thing) in poetic form. I would have like to get more than just vague questions (i.e. more ...

That was a profanity awesome poem! :p Thanks for giving background on the Australian lingo, it cleared some weird profanity up. I personally saw the poem as a parody of ...

"To many faces to remember." It should be "too". For one of your first poem you seem to get it. The first two lines I liked and hooked me into ...

Somebody is lucky to receive this poem! :) First stanza was excellent. Really just brought itself to life. The second stanza was good as well. The description of the eyes ...

Was rhyme purple using fluple, "Purple" and "fluple" don't rhyme. "Curple" and "hirple" are English words. They rhyme with "purple". "Angst" has no English word to rhyme with. :(