indieeloise

Hello, Thirsty! I'm Indie, and I'll be reviewing this lovely poem you have here. :) So I like this. You have a nice rhythm and idea of how to incorporate ...

Hello, abelgaiya! I'm Indie, here to review. First of all, forget the disclaimer - I, for one, wouldn't have considered you an amateur by judging your writing! It was well ...

Hello~ I'm Indie, and I'm here to review your piece, "As I Fly Around the World." So let's begin! Obviously, you used a lot of repetition in this poem. It's ...

Hiya, Meg! I'm Indie, here to review. I'll just start with little nitpicks, and conclude with my overall thoughts. Here goes! - At a first glance, I would suggest spacing ...

I thought this was absolutely beautiful. So captivating that my eyes simply refused to stray from the words until the end. I love the way you express your characters, especially ...

First of all, I love your story. It's raw in a beautiful way, and I've read it several times since you first posted it. Finally getting around to review it! ...

I really liked this. I understand the emotions of the speaker, of the memories rooted in a home. So personally, it was easy for me to connect with because I ...

This was a sweet short-short story. It kind of sounds like it could be either the beginning of the story of Leah's life, or the end of a story of ...

First of all, I loved the antagonistic perspective you wrote this in. Very original, and I felt like I could really get inside the mind of the main character. The ...

I really liked the storyline of this, mainly because I have written something very similar and so I appreciate the time and thought you put into this kind of plot. ...

Hello! I really like the repetition you used to begin each of your stanzas. "Let me.." gives an air of a certain passivity that is expressed in your character's actions. ...

Hello!~ I'll break this down stanza by stanza. "Goodbye pride, I can't have you anymore, My family says you make me A bad, bad boy." The last two lines of ...

Salutations!~ First of all, I love the two opening lines. The whole piece has a timeless appeal to it - reminds me a lot of classic Walt Whitman, and I ...

Hello! The first thing I noticed was that this poem would make for beautiful lyrics as well, maybe set to simple guitar strums? :) On line 5 (second stanza), "you're" ...

Hey again~ "Still, I didn’t like the thought that anyone could break in if they really wanted – with my seven-year-old mind I worried that, if a person entered the ...