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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor Re: Chapter 1. (Animal Politics)

    Who is Budhau? I'm assuming it's the old rat, but I'm not sure. I used to be once a Scout Rat once, as many of you already knows. As many ...

    Feb 13, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Action / Adventure Re: A

    Hi Yolbyi! This is a great start! I love the format because the diary makes it seem like you are talking directly to the reader, which I happen to like. ...

    Feb 10, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Supernatural Re: The Emotional Education of a Vampire

    Okay.. Here's your review! I love the ending! The last sentence is amazing! In the second paragraph you have a random capital letter... in the word completely. In the third ...

    Feb 8, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Supernatural Re: The Emotional Education of a Vampire

    Okay.. Here's your review! I love the ending! The last sentence is amazing! In the second paragraph you have a random capital letter... in the word completely. In the third ...

    Feb 8, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Wisdomatch - Chapter Two

    Wow! This is even better than the first! Okey dokey then here I go.. brimming coin bag. I would say: bag brimming with gold coins. Okay this is my own ...

    Feb 7, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Wisdomatch - Chapter One

    Hey! Iki here with your requested review! This story has a great start and the ending makes me want to read more. Like Stella said, I thought she was alone ...

    Feb 7, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Deleted

    Hi! I found this piece good, but it is not quite great yet... First of all, 'Loosing' should be 'Losing' in the title. Also the line: My imaginary voice was ...

    Feb 5, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Action / Adventure Re: The Magnificent Mansion (Chapter two)

    Hola mi amigo! I'm happy to see you have posted more! :D her fiery red hair hung loose to her shoulder blades tied in a French braid. I don't know ...

    Feb 5, 2013
  • Short Story » Romantic, Realistic Re: Renovation

    Wow. Just... Wow. This is really good! I love every bit of it! In the second paragraph you say: But you stop crying for a moment to survey the damage, ...

    Feb 4, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Ghost Trigger Ch.1 Part 1

    Hi! I will add comments or changes in red. :) This slumber was like death. This is a cool starting sentance, it makes me want to keep reading My exhaustion ...

    Feb 4, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Wordsmith

    Hi! This is really good! I love this poem. There are a few things I would change and I will highlight them in red: I am but a writer Through ...

    Feb 3, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Magnificent Mansion Chapter 1

    Hi! This is a really great story! I love the French, because I am taking it in school. One thing: Mademoiselle actually means Miss. Madam means Mrs. The story is ...

    Feb 3, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Chapter 1-Emma

    Hi! I really liked this story, after reading the Percy Jackson series and enjoying them. This story has great potential! Here are a few things I saw: in the first ...

    Jan 31, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, Other Re: I am not a killer (2)

    Hi! I like this poem. It's good but here is what I think: Is that all that bad?-- you say 'that' twice. Maybe say "Is it all that bad" or ...

    Jan 29, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Horror Re: Life and Death Chapter 1

    You say: Lie list so far: _______; let’s see how many I can get 12 times. Use different words to make the story more interesting.

    Mar 28, 2012


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