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  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic Re: It's Not You, but It Isn't Me, Either

    This is so perfect. I love poetry like this, it's so raw and emotional and beautiful. "I thought we were building and building but the bricks we used were made ...

    Jun 30, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: Don't Tell Me

    This is so beautiful. I agreed with every word you said and it flowed so magnificently and elegantly that I just want to read it over and over again. This ...

    Jun 30, 2013
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Romantic Re: Rebel's love

    I really liiked this story. At first I was a little skeptical but as it went on I liked it more and more. Because its a short story I think ...

    Apr 7, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Humor Re: A Beauty Never To Be Seen - Ch. 2 & 3

    I read the first chapter and is this still the same story? It seems totally different. Anywhooo I think you need to re-read this. There were a lot of little ...

    Apr 7, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Life's A Process

    This is one of the best things I have seen on here in a while. If it is a novel please PM me when you post more. There is nothing ...

    Jan 30, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Letting Go - Chapter One

    This was wonderful. I couldn't take my eyes off the page. I don't feel there is anything you need to change. PM me when you postmore (:

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Lessons Learned [ch.1]

    this was reallly good but I agree here should be her. I also think you should describe more. Like what they look like, wear, etc. PM me when you post ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: My Aborted Child

    This is a REALLY good story, there isn't much to improve that other people have not already pointed out. (: So good job! -pghpenguins

    Apr 5, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Sometimes (working title) Chapter one

    this was good, sure there were some mistakes, but you will find those when you re-read this. PM me when you post more, or just write on my wall, either ...

    Mar 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Self-Actualization

    I like this poem, I agree some of the lines didn't make sense but that may just be me. Good poem though. Jenn

    Mar 10, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: "F" = Failure

    This is really good. I liked it a lot. Keep writing. PM me when you post more work. Jenn

    Mar 10, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Random

    I really liked this poem although I do think you should change the title to something else, right now the poem could be about romance, or killings or anything. Keep ...

    Dec 26, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Mask

    very dramatic definitely the right folder :) haha. Touching though and relatable too:)

    Dec 26, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: First time writing poetry

    This is good I like how it flows and it is really well written by the way. Keep up the good work. jenn

    Dec 12, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: What happened? I don't want to talk about it.

    I reallly liked this and think you need to make it into a novel. although I do think you emphasized the fact that she hated him way to much, but ...

    Dec 5, 2010


We are all broken. That's how the light gets in.
— Ernest Hemingway