hockeyfan87

Hello! I really like the repitition from the first line and the last line, it draws it to an end, yet also seems to represent the circle of life I ...

I really liked this poem! I've moved a lot, so I related to a few parts of the poem. The only thing I was confused on was this line : ...

I couldn't seem to come to grips with the fact that I, My life, would never be normal. I don't think the 'm' in my life should be capitalized "Mrs. ...

Hello! I believe you messaged me asking for a review of this piece, correct? So here I am! I really liked this piece of writing and I liked how it ...

Hello! I believe you messaged me asking me to review this piece? Well here I am! :) Shall we get started? "Its stronghold on me kept me detached from myself ...

Hi there! I'm Jenn aka Hockeyfan87 and i'm going to review your work! "Tears are flooding her eyes, red bloody tears rolling down her cheek as she watches her love ...

I really like this. I like how short but sweet it is. The only thing I noticed is that butterflies isn't capitalized at the beginning. I don't know if that ...

Hello Ligaya! I'm Hockeyfan87 and I'm here to review your work! I really enjoyed this plot and the story. However, I feel that there was a little too much detail ...

Hello Aouther2B(think I got it correct haha ) Okay, I really loved this piece, not just because of how it was written or how it was delivered but because of ...

I agree with Jon7670, this is a very unique and cool idea and story! I really liked the dialogue, how it just flowed. I could imagine it happening between two ...

A hero never ment(meant) to be. With sorrows and memories. Raw lust and power,(maybe add commas between them, I don't know) That everyone and thing can eat.(may sound better as ...

Hello! My edits will be in capital letters and my overall review will be at the bottom of the edit! :) Pro-log usiku mwema (PROLOGUE? I DON'T KNOW IF THAT'S ...

Being that this was true I find it way too hard to criticize, the minor things that were present just made it more real and more relatable. If it had ...

Overall pretty good! I really liked the plot-line so far and I can't wait to see where it will continue in the future. There were some details that were just ...

I really loved this story. My aunt and uncle are both blind so I loved the fact that you had the blind girl in the story. Although, the last sentence ...