from kisses stolen,
like the age of
I love how simple this is but meaningful. Reminds me of butterflies in my stomach when you have those first sweet kisses. Then they disappear "like the age of innocence." I love how its so relatable without trying hard to sound convincing. It just is simple truth of a feeling, and somewhat witty. Love it, good job.-Laci <3
This poem is short and sweet and that's what I like about it.The concept is entirely right, innocence is a like butterfly kisses.The title drew me in towards the poem.I noticed the poem didn't rhyme, which is alright, but the fact that its short should mean that's there's more to it. I hope you get what I mean, but other than that, it's a cool poem, i guess.
Wow this is a really short, short poem; but I liked it! Remember to capitalize "butterflies" other then that I don't see much wrong. Your poem is short sweet and straight to the point; yet allows the reader to create different interpretations. It could be about a first kiss, first love, even first crush, a longterm relationship gone wrong; the interpretations are endless! That's why I really love short poems. You captured that innocence is lost within seconds very well, that something beautiful can be shattered within seconds. For some reason I can imagine this being in a song or you including this and making it into a longer poem. Overall you did great!
Wow, this is very beautiful for a short poem. Or course it's a bit too short, but it's fine to me.Also butterflies should be capitalized as others have probably told you, it's a simple fix, but if you don't want to be reminded about it, you could edit the poem and fix it that's all. Are these a part of a song? One would think so because one of the categories is lyrical, which is usually given to poems that are part of an actually song or that are meant to be read with a inning voice. That's what I think anyway. Also the size of the poem allows me to continuously analyze and examine the poem for and extended leghth of time. I like Thats aspect of this poem a lot. Also I like the way you gave 10 words a big meaning regarding the loss of innocence. Thanks for writing such a great poem! ~Dark
I like your poem it's short and sweet. The first letter of butterflies should be capitalized but other than that the poem was very good. You put the commas in the right places . It was a short way of putting a crush gone wrong or a ending relationship. Again I like this poem and I would like to read more of your work. Forgive me if this review is bad I'm new at this.
Hi! Just a little nit-picky thing, I would capitalize Butterflies to introduce your poem. This poem really says a lot, I'm guessing you can interpret it as a young love, or a love gone wrong, or even what someone thinks is love but has only appeared to become deceit. I really love short poems for the purpose that you can analyze them forever. I love the metaphors you've incorporated in the poem, and they are also relevant with the theme. For example, When One thinks of kisses, one also thinks of butterflies. They are in the same positive denotations and context. Good punctuation, you did no wrong with the commas. I overall really do like this poem. It's a good one. Keep writing!
I really like this. I like how short but sweet it is. The only thing I noticed is that butterflies isn't capitalized at the beginning. I don't know if that was supposed to be lower case for like writing purposes, if so then I don't think you need the period after innocence but yeah, you get the gist haha. Again, I really did like this though!
Hello there. I have to say, this is VERY short. However, in the few words you have posted there is a meaning. I would like to possibly read more, but if this is what you want, that is okay. I agree overall with the premise of the poem. In addition, the way it is written is simple, but sweet. Because this is so short, I thoroughly enjoyed reading the entire thing. My only hopes are for a bit more because I truly did love what you have here.
Very short. I never got the jist in this. I always think something comedic/dark when a piece first comes in mind. This is what I took from itButterflies (The good feeling you get from something, particularly someone you are attracted to),from kisses stolen (The other person in the relationship who ended up cheating you),disappears (The feeling is no longer there)like the age ofinnocence (There is no such thing as innocence anymore)I like it.*Not bad claps*6.2 out of ten
Takes me far back to ages before.It does seem as I get older that the sweet moments from my youth start to lose their color in a pallor of cynicism.Maybe that's why I'm such a fan of alt art but you really seem to make evident the poignancy of the innocence lost.I wouldn't say the age of innocence disappears as much as it fades into the gloomy, better-informed hues of the present Kind of like changing the lenses on a camera.I like the shortness; it highlights the vivid parts and leaves little for misinterpretation.
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