hekategirl

Hello! Seeing as you're a new member I would like to welcome you to the site!! I'm sure you'll enjoy yourself :D On to the critique: I like the idea ...

AH-HA! a poem I haven't reviewed. At last! Anyway, I liked this poem. It was interesting but there is some points I'd like to bring up...DUN DUN DUN daaa... you ...

I enjoyed the imagery and the use of the word "pearls" to mean "teeth" but there wasn't much rhythm to it. Every line seemed to stand alone, it didn't flow ...

Hello! I would just like to say that you have my old avvie, it was a little weird seeing you use it =P But, anyway, on with the critque. I ...

Hello :D I'd just like to say I'm a sap for love stories and that this one is no exception, although it seemed a little flat. I know it was ...

I LOVE this. Everything was so vivid it gave me the chills. Like someone else said it gave me the feeling of drowning, which I thought was really amazing! it ...

I can completely relate to what you're saying, but it's littered with too many cliches to be moving. Try to avoid saying things like "heavy heart" and "whisper into each ...

That was awesome. It was cute yet dark...like an cookie with arsenic filling. The flow was beautiful, except for a couple parts here: Two of them, on a journey bound, ...

I liked this, but it lacked something. You had some good imagry but it didn't really spark any response from me. It seemed more like a textbook overview of Wrath, ...

This is an enjoyable poem, very nice imagry but there was quite a few cliched refrences. 'Heart ripped to shreds' 'shadow of greif' 'dancing fireflies' although they aren't really that ...

Allah, I pray vengeance... Allah, I pray compassion for those who've learned to hate (I'm paraphrasing, it's not showing me the poem...) yeah, shove it, hypocrit and twerp. PsyLynx that ...

LOL! this 'uber' funny :wink: The formatting is a little off. And I'd like to point out this new feature on the YWS called a "Spellchecker". I think it might ...

Oh, Chandni!! Do people like come into my house and watch my life and write poems about it!?!?!? I can sooooooo relate to this. Because of that fact I'm a ...

I agree with J.Haux on all her critques. This is very reptitive poem and the lines don't really connect very well (Like Haux said). Try adding more depth to it, ...

The reason I was attracted to this poem was it kind of sounded like one of recent works (At least the title does) but this is a lovely poem, elegant. ...