hekategirl

This is incredible!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!! I can't say how much I adore this! "Rain smeared lipstick on the outside, Recreational glass kissed goodbye, Because they know out there, That ...

Like everyone else said, this was ok but you need to re-vamp it a little. "but why should you give kill yourself when you've already died inside?" I love this ...

YESSSS they kissed. Now I get to go give myself a cookie... Willow, how many times can I say that this is really, really good? what she said! :-D this ...

Thats is my all time favorite book in the whole intire world!!!!!! the first was is very, very, very good. But the second one is so amazing. Its even better ...

I'm here Sam!! sorry it took so long *pants from lack of oxygon* anyway this was a very good peice, very dreamy like everyone else said. But I think him ...

This is soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo incredibly extrodanarily good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love it!!!!! you are out of your writing block, Sam! woohoo!!!!!! but it was a

Here I am Sam! you happy now!? anyway I really like this like all of the other segments, but like I told you before, i'm getting kind of tired of ...

oooh nice ending, and I agree with Sam. More feeling in your charecters. And you had them go into the smoke (is their name for it?) to soon for me. ...

You used the word 'blur' way to much in this poem. And at the end of the last stanza where you say she dies it happend to abrupty for me. ...

I love this! I like how you go from rembering to present with the italics. And when you go: 'Oh. My. God' I like how put the peridos inbetween those ...

This isn't like poetry, its just 'a random stream of thought' like Chanson said. It needs more emotion, it needs more imagry etc. I don't get anything out of this, ...

I really like this, it flowed very nicely, but I agree with Emma; it seems like it should be longer. And when you tell us what its about at the ...

I love the idea for this poem; from a dying person veiw. Its so unique. I love it. But for some critque: Standing on the rim of hell Waiting to ...

Huh? what? mabye its just me but I didn't see a conecction to the title and the poem, and the poem itself didn't make much sense ethier. But this stanza ...

I like this poem, very grousome, but I like that :twisted: but this line was a little confusing: [qoute] Fog rolls in dark and dank and smelling of rotten flesh ...