Hello, @Dreami! I'm continuing my "Review Old Works Project" and your poem is my next victim, muahaha! Just kidding. I as well as you love horses, and this poem involves horses so what's not to like about it. Actually I did find one little problem with it here:
Millions of years passed in a second,
but finally the bell rang.
Out of 14 boxes come blurs--
Blurs of speed and light.
Maybe I read it wrong but I think you mean to say "Blurs the speed of light." to dramatize the poem. If not I see how it's still very good and fine. Anyway, my favorite part was the ending
No more can be said for a forgotten,
Beloved, but no longer to exist,
Many will forget that moment,
But one will never forget--
A horse who flies across turf,
who thanks that man,
for giving her wings.
Couldn't have said it better myself! Keep writing!
~Keep <3
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