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haven235

  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Mine.

    Ah, the good old days... This poem was pretty good! I do have a few nitpicks though: But, being formal in conversation, "Formal" doesn't sound right to me. "Polite" sounds ...

    Apr 5, 2015
  • Poetry » Horror, Fanfiction Re: The Joker: An inner monologue.

    Heya! Saw this and I was like "Hm. A poem about the Joker, the Clown Prince of Crime, one of my favorite villains of all time (rhyme not intended)," so ...

    Apr 4, 2015
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: Swindler Swindled

    An interesting look into the human mind! I overall enjoyed this. I don't have much to say about this piece. These are also nitpicks: I saw them all crowd around ...

    Mar 27, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Supernatural Re: War of the Angels Chapter One

    Heya! This story makes me think of the game series Bayonetta whenever I these angels are mentioned. The city name Angelus also reminds me of the anime Sora no Otoshimono ...

    Mar 27, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, Humor Re: A Second Chance!

    Hey, Donizback! Quite the interesting piece you have here! Initially, I was going to critique you on your tone, as it seemed too light for the subject, a person is ...

    Mar 27, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: fives

    Hey there! So this is supposed to be about a girl who falls in love with a bully and is conflicted by it. This is a really interesting way to ...

    Mar 5, 2015
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Remember the Cotton Candy Days

    Hi! when the sun and moon were our friends I understand that you're trying to say that we used to imagine as children, so the first stanza makes sense, save ...

    Mar 5, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor Re: Haunted Death

    Ooh an anime-inspired work *pounces on it.* Seeing that this was categorized under humor, and after reading it, I'm beginning to think that this work is a satire/parody of something ...

    Feb 28, 2015
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, Dramatic Re: The King

    Wow... You hooked me into the scene almost immediately and kept me reading throughout. The mood was perfect, the writing vivid, and you got Shikamaru's character spot-on. There was only ...

    Feb 18, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Humor Re: Tenebrae: Prologue

    A cross between DOOM, and QUAKE? Two of the best FPS's out there? I've gotta read this! And I did. And I could barely see what was going on. In ...

    Feb 17, 2015
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: One In A Million

    Yo! First few lines got me thinking, "does this have the same melody of Mulan's 'Be a Man?'" So at first, I hummed the words to that tune in my ...

    Feb 16, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Dramatic Re: Celestial Song

    I'd like to thank you for the review yesterday, as well as return the favor. But before that, what a coincidence! Just wrote a poem inspired by a song yesterday. ...

    Feb 10, 2015
  • Poetry » Literature, General Re: The Crowning

    And this is why you wear a condom... Jokes aside, this poem was well written. Took me a while to understand the message though, and I don't know if I ...

    Feb 8, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Academy - Chapter 1

    Alright! A new series from you! This reminded me of the Chuunin exams. You used that as inspiration, didn't you? Story-wise, it's interesting. I want to know more about this ...

    Feb 8, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Dramatic Re: Obscure (Chapter 1)

    Hey iamdesi! Unlike IceWinifredd, I liked getting to know about the character. To me, her ramblings were better than the actual story. You managed to make your main character likeable, ...

    Feb 8, 2015


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