guitargrl1323

Grape vines crawling up the gate . Tourists, loving my garden . My eyes watching the small boy . Fingers wander should probably be wandering to my fruit . Splendor ...

Have you ever heard the rainbow cry? Colors flowing down the cheeks of the sky Paint being thrown down this way Representing hurt, sadness, and pain It’s a horrible sound ...

Memories flash through my head in a blur Hurt fills my broken heart Tears stream down my forlorn face Depression slowly wears my body down this stanza was more of ...

1.I killed one in kill Calli 2.Pop em up on the floor 3.I neva went to the valley 4.I just banged on his door 5.Yea it's the king muthafuckas know ...

[1ST VERSE] There’s this dream, I don’t know if I’ll make it true All I know is how I want it so much I may no have backs to lay ...

hey, welcome to YYS!!! just for you to know, you need to comment on two pieces before you post your own writing. now, to the story... i liked it, although ...

this is good. i couldn't read anything wrong with it, but for a song it might be a little too long. I got the feeling that it would go to ...

um no offence, but i don't really think this would make a good song. unless it has a lot of instrumental parts, the whole thing would probably take up to ...

Does anyone out there think I'm worth it? Would anyone listen to every little petty plea To every worry, every bit of self-condemning pity? These days I feel like curling ...

hey kris this was a good poem. the grammar was correct and everything, and it used good language. the only thing you might want to fix is the title. It's ...

ello mate this definately qualifies as music. the only problem i really had was that in the beginning, you started out talking about classical music, but then move on to ...

I have seen a thousand days Go by without a whisper. Taken down from my stand, I find myself down for the count. The skies turn dark and the rain ...

i liked it=] the only problem i had was in the following stanza: And what would be there forever, to inspire us to leave our din, if the peace that ...

this was ok. It didnt really have any fluid thought didn't make sense throughout. You should try adding more detail and make the topic clearer. Broken light, dancing to the ...

for a first attemt this really good, just a couple of things: Here’s another broken song, Here’s one more sigh for you. I’m thinkin’ life’s become more difficult Since the ...