groganbabygirl

Hi there! I really have got to compliment you on this work. Your reasoning is very sound. At the beginning you briefly outlined the possibilities and then hit us with ...

This story almost made me cry. The twist you put on the British bombings is heart wrenching. Great Britain is extremely underrated during WW2. They endured so much, and recieve ...

Hi Steggy! First of all, great story. I love how it isn't at all cliche, totally unique. Also, I love Shel Silverstein, so I appreciate this story. I don't have ...

Hey! Don't you DARE dog on yourself! This is great work! Your meter is on point, and your subject is so unique. Your formatting is perfect! And you're only 13! ...

Wow! I usually don't like fantasy, but wow. That was awesome. You have a couple of minor punctuation errors. Towards the beginning, you need to either pick commas or dashes, ...

First of all, welcome to YWS!! We are happy to have you! Very nice to "meet" you! Check out the forums for new members, and if you have any questions, ...

Hey there. I enjoyed following this story thought the eyes of a child. Toward the end "...and I only breath when necessary." the correct usage there would be breathe. Also, ...

Hey I really enjoyed the double meaning in this poem. You're not just running a literal race-- but life in itself is a race. Forming this poem as a prayer ...

Hey. A very relatable and humorous piece. The twist you threw at us in the last stanza really made the poem. A couple little things: the letters i and t ...

Hey. I really enjoyed this work--and really like your work in general. This poem is funny,serious, and true all at the same time. The rhyme scheme was an excellent choice ...

This is simply beautiful. The more of your work I read, the more I love your style. I did happen to catch some capitalization errors. I'm not sure if the ...

Hey snazzypencil. This poem really made me laugh. Every writer knows the struggle of staring at a blank page. A couple things: I'd change idea-less child in the third stanza ...

Here we go with a review! I really like the informal style of this piece. No major grammar issues that I could find. The questioning nature of a child is ...

Okay. Absolutely love this piece. I think it would flow a little better if in the third stanza, last line, you used couldn't, as opposed to could not. Just my ...

Hey! I really enjoyed this piece. Your plot and characters were realistic, nothing too showy or dramatic, just very down to earth. One thing, fifth paragraph- first sentence, you should ...