Dogs, cats, they are the animals most likely to be left on the street. Also, their only routine is to survive the harsh conditions including dangers on the street which is able to kill them. As they aren’t use to wild condition due to living as a pet, it is hard for them to survive. You should not purchase a pet unless you’ll keep them because they will be left in dangerous, harsh, and hazardous environment which is on the street in cities.
First of all, animals which are searching for habitat aren’t able to adapt to the environment surrounded by human’s technology. For example, there is some staying under the car, near the pole or even in front of the mansion. Most pets which were abandoned in Korea were sent to the pet center. Surprisingly, I have seen a situation where street dogs are kept inside a building with a medicine inserted in their body killing them without a pain after a year. This is a serious cause of problem because there is a case that some dogs and cats should be killed for more space provided for abandoned animals. To reduce numbers of animal dying, we need you to prevent abandoning animals.
Some animals will consume garbage street for food. To survive, people need food and so for animals. In these dangerous street, there is no condition for them in order to get clean foods. Instead, they will find a smell of garbage including rotten foods. Some will say they were not able to expect the situation they had to abandon them. There is possibility where people do have unexpected problem however, most people don’t abandon animals unless it is a serious problem. If it is serious, people will be concerned about purchasing pets according to their plans they were anxious about.
At last, if people wants pet, most reasons why is to enjoy, train, and to share happiness with. If they are left alone, they don’t have anybody to rely on unless, somebody takes them and pet them. If there isn’t chance to take care and stay with them, it is not a best choice to stay then abandon them. Especially people who leaves animals on the mountain or empty plane road, they are emotionless, and is a person who thinks animal’s life is not important.
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It is nice to write about something like that!
I really like it and your feelings are put in it perfectly.
Sometimes I found some sentences odd because they were not connected with the following or previous sentences. One person had already reviewed and told you basically what to look at and correct in your story.
I find the poor grammar as a bad thing because it makes me think it will make no sense and the writer will not use their own grammar right.Buy your statements are fine.You can correct it yes but I like it that you are writing for something like that.It is worth it.Try to read this out loud or like you talk to someone.
Because it really helps.
First of all, welcome to YWS!! We are happy to have you! Very nice to "meet" you! Check out the forums for new members, and if you have any questions, most of us old dogs are willing to help you out.
Writing about pet abandonment is a very worthy subject. And you did a very good job at sounding confident in your statements. When you are writing persuasive essays, it is VITAL that you use correct English. The thought process of your reader is: If he/she can't even use correct English, how do they know anything about the subject he/she is writing about?
So, I would definitely look into your subject-verb agreement. Try reading this essay aloud. Pretend that you are actually talking to someone. That will help with your agreement and my next point, punctuation. For example, your intro sentence, the way you used commas at the beginning is incorrect. I would suggest restructuring your sentence to say something like: Dogs and cats-- the animals most likely to be left on the street. Once again, read it out loud and you will get a good feel of where to put commas.
Now, focusing on the thought process you followed here, it doesn't always flow and make logical sense. Your introduction sentence states that dogs and cats are the most likely to be abandoned. Aren't they basically the only pets to really be abandoned? Your second sentence- I think I understand what you are trying to say, but I'm not sure. I think you are trying to say that the only option they have is to resort to life on the streets. First sentence of your second paragraph states that pets are not able to adapt, which is an incorrect statement. I would agree that it is difficult for them to adapt, but it is not impossible. I liked how you brought Korea into the picture, as it shows that you know what you are talking about. Your third paragraph is rather vague and choppy. The second sentence is irrelevant in my opinion, as we all know that people need food to survive. And then you switch abruptly to the situation that causes owners to abandon their pets. The last two sentences need restructuring, as they are confusing to your readers.
I really liked how you wrapped up the essay! It pulls on your emotions, arouses fury and indignation. It is great! If you feel like I have ripped you apart, please realize it it only with the best of intentions. Anyone in opposition to your opinion will really tear this apart and not even listen to what you are trying to say if you aren't strong in your English and your argument. If you have any questions, let me know.
I am going to review you article about abandoning pets today. The facts you used in your article are nice and they are definitely needed to support this article. I see that you have lil to no punctuation errors. The fact about Korea giving the animals a medication to kill them after a year is actually a humane way to kill an animal. The last thing I have is that if I were a pet and I was abandoned ,I would probably do what you have said in this article.