forest_ofthe_nightingale

There was a lot of emotion in this poem and I felt as though I were hearing the rant of a child at their mother. Good rhyming, not forced. But ...

I like the last word a lot. I'm just going to tell you that first. She knows I long for her, Despite the staring she causes, Despite the sickness she ...

I apologize in advance as I am not going to be as kind. :D OK, first off, if the maiden's hand was stolen by the king of Haden, why would ...

The only problem I had with this poem was that you explained it at the end. Don't bother. It's beautiful and I think you should let readers think what they ...

Mirrors are wonderful things to write about. 100/100 on subject!!! Yay!!! Just a couple of grammatical things: instead of a comma at the end of the first line, it should ...

"a part" should be "apart". And take Firestarter's advice. His punctuation and grammar makes your poem flow better and pause in the correct places. It's a nice idea and I ...

SPELLING! stil should be "still" an should be "am" higer should be "higher" Feirce should be "fierce" Spell check, won't you? :D Either I'm really tired or there was no ...

The ending was a bit... surprising? It was too abrupt, as Muse said. You may like it like that, but in my opinion, you need some form of prior foreshadowing. ...

Well I happen to live in a small town... we're not like this! ... Okay, maybe a little... all right! We are! I know you already know this, but I'll ...

I agree that that's either too many colors close together or too few. I suggest either changing the order of your stanza so there's no two color descriptions next to ...

Well titled. You really got under this person's skin and showed us her wants the way she would. Good job. There is one stanza, though, that doesn't quite fit and ...

Considering all the restrictions (must rhyme, must have refrain, etc.) it's not all that bad. The only reason I gag is because it reminds me of the teacher that assigned ...

First off, fix your grammar and spelling. But that's already been said, so I'll leave that and continue. You don't get a very strong beginning when you end your first ...

There's a lot of pain and confusion in this poem, so much so that it was difficult to comprehend. However, this can be a very good effect and I enjoyed ...

The ending was just kind of like "what? Hold on, I have to reread that". You need to be clearer in your point for writing and make sure readers aren't ...