fireheartedkaratepup

I love this, actually. The variation intrigues me. As Kyll said, though, this isn't Old English, this is Biblical style. Try reading the original Beowulf some time. Can't read it? ...

Hmmmm. Very interesting. You might consider shortening the beginning; I'd assumed this was merely a re-telling and began to skim until I noticed you were talking about a woman. (I've ...

How do I review this? I want to frame it and hang it on my wall. ......and, since I have nothing else to say, I think I'll go visit the ...

Ok, so what are you doing here? The first stanza rhymes, the second stanza doesn't, the third stanza repeats, and the fourth...ends the poem in the style of the second ...

Alright. You've gotten general. I'm gonna nitpick a bit. [ Looking around the room a weapon, *for Mac stumbled out of the bed he had been laying on. Aaaaand here's ...

The first stanza. I don't understand it. Ok, so you're expecting startling discoveries, as per the usual explorer, but you don't find... moss? That part threw me for a loop ...

The first stanza. I don't understand it. Ok, so you're expecting startling discoveries, as per the usual explorer, but you don't find... moss? That part threw me for a loop ...

Aww, you changed pyjamas. :( You can spell it that way, it's just not American. :P Disadvantage: the title reminds me of The Boy in the Striped Pajamas . Immediately, ...

First of all, what is this? Because it looks like a rant. It's true that poems can be... essay-ish, I guess, I can't find the word I'm looking for; but ...

Whoah there. You've made this very hard to read, and for that I congratulate you, because it means you've painted a picture that's hard to look at. You've also done ...

Aad;lfjad;fa. I've already told you how much I adore this. Dissection time. (I'll try not to repeat anything, but my memory makes no promises.) First stanza: I looooooooove the "dotting ...

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ALJK;ALDJLFJAD WOLF'S RAIN Only it's fox's rain. :3 I loved this! It was wonderful. You have a lot of talent as a writer. Now, nitpicks: It felt a bit too ...

I do my nitpicks first. It's just my default, for some reason. Corrections in red, as per usual. Slowly, things were returning to normal . The Governors, who had convened ...

Yo! So, this might not be worth a full review, since I really only have one comment. :/ But this part: Because I will take him down and find real ...