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I think that you did a great job with this poem. I’m a nightmare disguised in happy lies This is my favourite line.I think you did a great job with ...

I think your poem is a little confusing in its current state. While reading it I also noticed a mistake rhe heartbeat taunted me. I think you mean "The heartbeat ...

Wow you certainly have had an interesting life so far. I have a suggestion, please break your writing up into paragraphs. If you break up writing into paragraphs it makes ...

I love Don’t speak around the gossip ones, For they have enough to say. We all want to be “someone” In the future we just may. There is so much ...

Your doing good in french. I think this poem is beautiful I especially love the last line. Avant que les hommes, plein d'appétit arrive -- pour cuellir cette fleur d'amour ...

I thought part two was good. You definitely built up the suspense at the end. I did notice a few mistakes you need to remember to capitalize the beginning of ...

This poem is incredibly depressing.Please remember to capitalize "I". I cannot find any other mistakes as far as grammar and spelling.I have one suggestion I don't really like how your ...

This is intriguing. I like it sounded friendly but overly inviting. I didn’t trust it. I gently pushed the door open and practically peered through the slowly widening gap. I ...

I like it. Your story reminds me of "The Monkeys Paw". I recently did a project on Africa and I don't think that many people off the Ivory Coast practice ...

Your main character sounds like she has had quite a horrible life thus far.I am going to focus on your sentences because I have noticed a couple mistakes. Clients are ...

I think you did a great job. Some parts of the piece seem metaphorical. I have not read any of the books you read before submitting this piece but, after ...

I liked the start of your story. My sister is talented with ballet and she has done numerous performances. I think you should talk more about her "fighting imaginary dragons ...

That was Awesome.I love it it seams like a cross between Star Wars and Fringe the show on T.V. Thank you for the review of my first work. I think ...

You have an interesting poem. I hope you entered it in the writing Olympics. It is so vague thought I think you could change the second line around a little ...

Your poem is ok.I have a few suggestions for you... My siblings or confused I think you might want to say "my siblings are confused". I work for her she ...