Reggie stared out at the rain. it had been two months already, two months since she defeated the first vour, two months since she had saved her brother, two months since she had slept a full night. Poor Henry, she thought, it had to be him. her brother was still recovering form drastic hypothermia and from his horrible experences in his fear scape. Her father still didnt believe that he had been trapped in his own body by a fear eating monster. Thank God for the little bookstore reggie worked at. Thank God for her best friend, Aaron. With out them she would be lost and probably still batteling Henrys demons, literally. Luckily she didnt have to deal with school any more, now that it was spring break. Still she couldent help feeling that it would never really be over, dealing with people, henrys night terrors, the vours themselves. She was contemplating her sadness when the phone rang.
"hey Reggie!" said the person on the other line. it was Jared Markos, the new kid at school, in her science class.
"hey Jared." Reggie was Stiff with her reply. she was still paranoid from the Quinn situation.
"i was wondering if you could help me with science. ya know Tutor me? im still tryin' to catch up."
Reggie didnt know how to answer, she didnt want to have to experience a vour again, but, then again Jared didnt seem like a vour.
"yeah sure when?"
"when ya got time" reggie had nothing but time.
"any time except wednesdays 2:30-8:30, working then."
"ok how bout tuesdays at 5?"
"sure see ya."
reggie hung up, she felt like slamming her head against the wall. Aaron and Henry were going to kill her. she shook her head then went to go get henry from hockey.
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Adrian, Jared now smiled at himself. The girl was his now. Revenge, he thought to himself, a dish best served fearful.
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Ohhh...... sorry i just fnished reading the book 5 days ago.....
teehee!!
-megan,ali,the psyhco!-
@: Meggs! they are charecters i made up for my story.
@: Peanut! thank youz!
The DeVouring. I love that book and will review this tomorrow.
~peanut~
Hey! I read a book like this!
But I have no clue who Jared and Adrian are.
Me very confuzzled..... love thsi story though!
Keep up the good work!
~the short psychopath~
I thought part two was good. You definitely built up the suspense at the end. I did notice a few mistakes you need to remember to capitalize the beginning of sentences and remember that "I" is always capitalized.
This is a very long sentence that I would consider revising. you also forgot to capitalize. Have a great night and keep writing.