fading-dream

Lilicia got most of what I wanted to say. I really liked this story. I love that the characters are flawed. I found the description of killing the boy a ...

This story was excellent, especially the title :) I have to say this felt rather like a fable. It's a rather simple story told in a wonderful way. It's something ...

You have captured what many authors fail at. The writing is not about capitalization and punctuation but about rhythm, feeling, flow. You have succeeded wonderfully. I love the metaphor and ...

HAHAHAHA! That was hilarious! The whole thing was just hilarious in general. Just to be sure, it was the wolf coming in at the end, right? I love the excuses. ...

I thought this was an okay piece of literature, but it needs editing. The idea of it was super creepy and I felt disgusted after at what people can do. ...

Allow me to be the first to comment. First of all, I really like your premise. A stressed out and over-worked woman enters a fantastical world in which she escapes ...

At first, I thought that this was going to be another Twilight clone, but as the story went on, I could see I was very wrong. Your idea is solid ...

I'm not sure how I feel about this. On the one hand, it is just an intro. On the other, there is nothing to make the reader want to come ...

I thought this was pretty good. The first line is the perfect opener to a story like this. I agree that cutting out the line about getting pregnant would be ...

Okay, nitpicks first: "She gestured for me to stop and sighed heavily. “I told you specifically never to go anywhere near that place. Why did you not do as you ...

I thought it was a very good beginning. It's not boring, as many novels first chapters are. It makes you wonder what is happening and why. I'll definitely be reading ...

I thought it was well written, though your characters, like everyone said, were very flat. There was no character development, though the narrator was the more interesting one. I was ...

I thought this had potential but never went anywhere. The person gets into a cab, goes to some random place, and then goes to their hotel. I didn't see the ...

It thought this was very well written, though a tad short. The main problem is that you start talking about a woman, and then the world ends. There's really no ...

Definitely presents a very interesting concept. I'm really interested in how nightmares play into this. I do however, have one small complaint; for some reason, I can't stand present tense ...