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Hey carmenbluestar! Wisegirl22 here to review! Well, there isn't much to say. This was a short piece all in all, only four lines. But I still found two things. One, ...

Hey, ChiravianSkies! I'm wisegirl, and I'm here to review your work. I like this description. However, there shouldn't be a space between "any" and "more". "His chest heaved, and as ...

Okay, you asked for help, you got it. So what I do is that every stanza, I put a label. A song has two verses, a chorus, and a bridge. ...

Hey Sak! Wise here for Wizards. So, first line. There should be a space after the comma, if you're going to use one. It should actually be two sentences. Also, ...

Hey Margo! Wise here for Team Wizards! I know this is comic, so I'll try not to judge you too harshly. And I suck at reviewing art, so be prepared ...

I'm here to say I loved this. I can't relate to the athlete part but I sort of can because I push myself waaaaay to hard when I'm writing or ...

Hey, it's wisegirl22! And I'm going to review your work! (Don't take my advice if you want your work to get better...:D...just kidding.) First off, you don't need to capitalize ...

Hey, bloodybell! It's time to review! So, as I was scanning the first term, I found this. There's a word that's unnecessary and you can get rid of it: "ever". ...

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Hey, bloodybell! It's time to review! So, as I was scanning the first term, I found this. There's a word that's unnecessary and you can get rid of it: "ever". ...

Kanome, I love this. This is so sweet. I don't know what to say. You must really really love your sister. I do think you could edit out the space ...

CaptainSaltWater, great! This poem was great. I'm not really sure if I should point this out, seeing the mood of this piece, but there are younger people on this site, ...

Hey, ishitadutt! Welcome to YWS, we're happy to have you here! Okay, first off, you describe the night as a breezy cold night. However, breezy and cold don't go well ...

Hey, BlueAfrica. Just a quick note, do not be offended by my comment. I mean absolutely no harm (trust me, I've seen some peculiar YWSers and try NOT to be ...

Hey, Brandi101! Wise here. I don't know much about the Holocaust. But you did a great job getting me more info! However, you did go too fast and might want ...

Hey, Tiff! Glad we talked in the chat room. This was a unique work! I'm so sorry that you've heard this already, but your poem sounds more like two people ...