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Hey, Rosendorn! This is Lupa for a review on Review Day (for the first time in forever, apparently). 1) ...but this time they seemed to be any other stone. This ...

Hey, CrimsonAngel! Lupa here for a veeeeery rusty review. Let's get to it! :D 1) The feeling is a horrendous,cold,black emptiness that leaves you hurt and aching wishing for something ...

Hey, marms! It's Lupa for a review on Review Day! :D With that being said, let's get into it. 1) A curse! Margo’s heart skipped, What will Juno think? “I ...

Hey there! It's Lupa with a lovely review. Let's get to it! :D 1) So, it's interesting that you're putting your poem in paragraph form. This type of poem actually ...

Hey, Kara! It's Lupa here to answer them questions. 1) I felt a bit overwhelmed. You did incorporate a lot of fonts, sizes, and colors, which was new, and it ...

Hi, MJ! Glad to see another one of your stories! Let's get into it. :D 1) Waves slapped against the shore, and I buried my feet in the warm sand ...

Heya, MJTucker! Lupa here for a RevMo review! :D Let's get started. 1) It is uncertain who his father is, since Aethra was with both Posiedon and Aegus, king of ...

Heya, MJTucker! Lupa here for a RevMo review! :D Let's get on it. 1) He cut into the egg, biting into the yolky goodness and biting into a piece of ...

Hey, Mea! Lupa here for a review on another lovely chapter! :D 1) Ayda was sure she wouldn’t be able to sleep, but exhaustion overcame the chaos inside her, and ...

Hey, DemonGoddess! Lupa here for a RevMo review. Let's get started! :D 1) “Stay behind me, Bard,” the 11-year old ordered his brother through the roaring downpour of the rain. ...

Hello, Phoenix! Congratulations on your first submission to YWS! :D My name's Lupa, and I'm here to review your work. Let's get started. 1) While your beginning is pretty good, ...

Hey there, Carrot! Lupa here for a review! :D Let's get started. 1) I noticed right off the bat that you spend a lot of time on description. You can ...

Heyo and welcome to Young Writers Society! I'm Lupa and I'm here to review your work. :D Let's get into it! 1) The first few lines are great, and they ...

Heya, soundofmind! Lupa here for a RevMo review! :D Let's begin. 1) In the first stanza, I feel like there's a little bit of tense switching, except you manage to ...

Hey Aley! Lupa here for a RevMo review. :D I'm going to go ahead and answer your questions for you. 1) The last stanza is super descriptive. I would never ...