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This is an interesting poem in that it shows us what other countries think of America. I would, if I were you, try to emphasize the idea of this being ...

The look in her eyes as she shines and as she gleams Possibly change this to The look in her eyes as she shines, as she gleams because it's a ...

Hey I did already take a look at this poem but I don't really have anything to say except that I agree wholeheartedly with everything you wrote. Love saved him ...

The first thing I would do is get rid of the intro. I don't know why, but if you start with all sorts of disclaimers it just gets the reader ...

This was really beautifully written. I love the imagery, especially in the second stanza, and I love the way you put a new twist on a love story by making ...

Basically the first half was totally beautiful. I just have a few nitpicks: All of the bodies at night are obtained That felt like a bit of a stretch. Pain ...

I don't know what this new fad is for writing this in the second person. I've never seen it in a book, only occasionally in published poems. So for some ...

This has a lot of good imagery, but it is too long. I've read prose before that's been converted into poetry, and this reads like that. You take too long ...

Nowhere to escape to now, not even one comfortable safe place Hey, I really like the gist of your poem; how it sort of relates to the title but doesn't ...

I think you'd like this song, if you haven't listened to it already: Just in case you're afraid to click on it, it's a collage of Van Gogh pictures played ...

I hate it when the first thing people say about short poetry is that they wish you would "expand it." So of course I'm going to say just that. Only ...

Hey I've been following this novel and even though I really enjoy it so far I've been a little wary to comment. This is because, from what I understand you ...

Hey I just wanted to say something really quick about this poem taken for granite or taken for granted? At first I thought maybe it was a play on words, ...

I love the new take on this. A lot writers like to write about writing and writer's block and such (a gratuitous form of writing, to be sure) but this ...

I was really hoping to have something constructive or at least coherent to say because I'm one of those people that hates to gush BUT all I have is this ...