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This is rather simplistic. So I will smile for a while And let my heart rejoice with wine Then watch my enemies cry through the night this led on to ...

Floods your senses, burns your mark Mark? a lot of things rhyme with dark-- shark, hark lark, spark, bark, stark... maybe reword this with a different phrase. Do they, could ...

I like how the last two lines rhymed, but that's just me. So that hen I realize you’ve changed hone=when. Besides that, good job. I guess her heart is twice ...

That was beautiful. The stanza at the end came as a bit of a shock, but in a good way. The eager of time. possibly eagerness? Because this sentence is ...

Umm... I think this is in the wrong spot, dear. This is lyrical poetry; I think this belongs in fan fiction. Also, polls tend to distract the reader from your ...

I would guess that, if it were a song it would have a little more repetition and something that looked like a chorus. But I don't know, I am also ...

Hello again Zenjoy :) this was a beautiful poem but I'm not really understanding your reasons behind the repetition for "Obliged" and "comply" some places they seen too abrupt for ...

I kind of get where you're coming from, eurobeat. The Brazilian coastal lights Clustered on the coast A feeble ghost Of the United States’ yellow-whites In China people rouse I ...

A fantastic job-- this poem aroused in me a sort of fear, as this hasn't occurred just yet but, inevitably, it will. :( Not to turn this into a cry ...

Hello there, I agree with Mcmourning on his corrections, but I have to say that I loved this piece. The style, the way your formatted it, the rhyme scheme (though ...

I love Snoink's reviews. They're always so... bouncy. I think that was a wonderful piece of work. However, I don't like this line. I fall, and he does not reach ...

*nods vigorously at the comments above* I feel like this is kind of...brief. Usually I'm a big fan of short, but concise but in this case it felt like you ...

Hello midnight, Nitpicks Lets Listen to the sound of the rain Jump in the puddles puddles Laugh till we cant breath Alone time isn't good for the heart So lets ...

Hello native catcher, Thanks for picking me to be your reviewer. You have a few problems with repetition; don't be afraid to just state the thing once. It won't come ...

Thank god I checked my thread :) Almost missed ya. That was actually quite amazing. One thing It tried to lunge past Barney, hands reaching for the gate latch. The ...