Published December 4, 2009
Rhyming, timing,
Dreaming, scheming,
The words they seem to flow
Pencil, paper,
Idea shaper,
Writing is all I know
Novels, stories,
Tales of glory,
Worlds at my command
Write it, type it,
Nothing like it,
Writing is all I know
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*nods vigorously at the comments above*
I feel like this is kind of...brief. Usually I'm a big fan of short, but concise but in this case it felt like you were just getting your thoughts rolling and then you stopped.
Besides that, it was a great poem with energy and rhythm. Good job.
keep thyming,
Empress
The rhyming in this is very bouncy and flowing. All I can say is awesome job, this is a cute little poem ;)
this was written really well!
I rather enjoyed reading it, it had a nice pattern and flow to it. The short two first lines, followed by the last a bit longer, i liked it.
It was really good. Can't find nothing wrong with it.
I love it! The rhythm in this is beautifully light.
Apart from what has already been said, 'noting,' in the last verse should be 'nothing.'
I would say you could encorperate a rhyming scheme with the last line of each stanza, but I quite like the whole thing the way it is.
Well done
Hello there. This was quite a well written poem, and I could find nothing wrong with it except for grammar.
Each stanza which you've written consists of four words and then a short phrase.
To punctuate them, you do this:
Where it should be:
'
Semi-colon: These usually happen when you want to merge two complete thoughts into one sentence, which is exactly what your doing.
Period: It outs a final stop and gives a sense of closure to each stanza, or sentence. Even poems must follow the basic rules of grammar.
Other then that, I loved it. It was provocative and very well written. Other then what I mentioned in the review, I wouldn't change a thing.
PM me if you have questions.