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Maybe you should have done something about your sister's actual leave... Sorry, that sounded heartless... Anyway, I liked this. It showed your relationship with your sister and how her leaving ...

The lines were a bit choppy, but I liked the poem itself, especially the last stanza.

That made me really sad, for some reason... Very nicely written.

The beginning is necessary, I guess, but it didn't really seem to be connected to the rest of the story... Anyway, I liked the way you wrote this. Good job.

I didn't really start liking the poem until the end... and the poll... it really ruined the message.

I liked it. I don't know why, but I liked the last two lines, (the contradictory no's and yeah). I know, I'm weird. Anyway, I like this because it feels ...

The last paragraph was a bit confusing, but I like the way you wrote it.

It was written well, but I didn't like it as much as you other poems.

Very intense and emotional... Really good...

The last stanza seemed conflicting, like you weren't sure whether you are trying to talk about him doing everything for you, or you returning the favor. If you arrange it ...

Very nicely written. A simple enough transaction, but it was described with so much detail and emotion.

haha Nice start.

That was interesting. The scene with the house was described very well. I hope you let us read more of it.

That was really cool. Some of them were kind of random, but I like all of them.

It confused me a bit, but I liked the words and imagery you used. The poem was so pretty, even though I was confused.