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Just some nitpicks: Cliff Johnston, where are you? How am I supposed to feel? Were you my best friend? What am I supposed to believe? This was the repeating stanza, ...

:D That made me laugh, sort of. I liked it. By no means am I an animal's rights activist and I have no intention of being one anyday. So horse ...

There were some spelling/grammar errors and such... and yeah... She wants to leave him, She closes her eyes, she pretends. At some points, the rhythm is awkward, like here. The ...

A forboding aura hovers around the darkened forest Wouldn't it be 'forbading'? A chill runs up my spine, as mournful cry is heard from within the forest... The second clause ...

Heh, I have no clue... The closest thing to an analysis that I can get is something that turned out wrong and what might have happened if things went differently. ...

This seemed horribly cliche... especially these lines: Slit My wrists Slowly the pain is my one true love watch me bleed The outline of my body on the hardwood floor ...

you want something from me and that something is something that I lack You do use 'something' a lot in here, but I think you should just add after 'me.' ...

I liked it, but I didn't really start to like it until this line: spring petals suffocate in the winter mist. The beginning seems all right, but didn't really catch ...

I saw you didn't have any comments on this, so even though it was awhile ago... the brim hat you wear This line... I don't know why, but I didn't ...

Just one grammar thing: Why do you look at me with such disgust in your eyes (metaphorically speaking) when I have said nothing, done nothing that could possibly be construed ...

Hehe... I'm going to nitpick small errors because I can... even if they already make sense... :D The one that pops into mind right now is one you told us ...

I don't really have a suggestion for the last line, but... I thought this was all right, but too rushed. Maybe you could organize it better so that it wouldn't ...

It was a bit confusing... Some grammatical and spelling errors. The story was rushed, too. Maybe more description would make it less confusing. Here are your first two sentences. So ...

There are a lot of grammatical and spelling errors in the story, making it incredibly hard to read and follow the plot. Here are some examples: Tears turned to anger ...

I know it's much to late too were things can start again. where It was a bit rushed, so it was hard to get anything from it. I sort of ...