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Okay, Shishu95, I think Elinor is right. Its falls a little flat. Maybe, instead of using just the girls feelings and thoughts, you could incorporate them into a small prologue. ...

I think that your poem is interesting, Isha. I mean, sure, its not really, really, good. But you do have some talent. For me, I think you need to losen ...

Hi, Papersolstice! I liked your poem. The very idea of it is interesting, why do we ask why? But, at the same time, I believe that Galerious is right. Well, ...

Wow, depressing. Of course, I like depressing. Okay, the only problem I have with it is the repetitiveness. Reading of and Mama over and over just makes me annoyed. Other ...

Wow Flower Child, that's depressing. What kind of bored are you talking about? I loved it. I like depressing poems, they give more feeling. I especially liked the end when ...

Um, sorry, but haikus are about nature. I agree with hannah on how sly could fefer to the moon but no, this haiku doesnt work. Anyways, haikus are all about ...

Wonderful! An amazing read, different from other fantasy stories. I particularly love the idea of the way he came to the village, how he hears the voice in his head, ...

It was good, sort of confusing. First of all, I think that you need to describe your actual settings more. You seem to focus much on the girls thoughts and ...

This seems like a great beginning! I love your idea. The character Suirikal made a shiver run down my spine, I like him. Personally, I agree with what Master_Yoda said. ...

I think that your poem needs more description. Think of how much more people would know if you added something like "His mysteriously soft skin is like a drug to ...

I liked this poem. Along with Elinor Brynn and Suzanne I agree that the main thing you need is punctuation and structure. But, on the other hand, I loved the ...

Okay, to be honest, this was really bad. I did like the idea of the kids traveling through time. Maybe you should make there be less kids or something. Nine ...

I think this was on the verge of being very cliche but i still liked it. Mr.Davis and Dr.Smith have that familiar feel of evil villains. I, personally, think that ...

I liked it. Well, it was okay. Good start but i think you need to add more. Describe the place they are. Show the reader more emotion. I connected a ...

Okay, very confusing near the end. Unlike asxz, (And one more thing: Why would the captor just leave him there? You have some questions to answer!), I feel like a ...