elephantwalrus

Hi there! I love the dark tone of this piece, and I'm a sucker for chivalry, so I really enjoyed this poem. A few hopefully helpful remarks: the following stanza ...

Hi there! This poem is intriguing. I like how you did something unique with the idea of "coloring outside the lines." You turned a cliche into a crisper and sophisticated ...

Hi there! I really love all the imagery you use in this piece; it's memorable, and I'm intrigued to here the music behind it. Do you have a recording of ...

Hi there! Can I say, wow? I liked this a lot, and am surprised that no one else has oogled over it yet. Your descriptions are powerful, and the MC ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! This piece is intriguing. I love the characters; for some reason, I imagine them talking in British accents, and it makes me happy. Anyway, a ...

Hi there, First off, I love how much detail there is about the OtherWorld and its inhabitants. You've obviously given this a lot of thought, which is awesome. The prologue ...

Hi there! The answer to your question is yes. Yes you should. You have a knack for detail, and your MC is engaging and fun. I'd love to see where ...

Hi there, First off, I am so impressed with the cleverness of this topic. Your description and the imagery you use to describe this mundane happenstance makes it sparkle, and ...

Hi there, To answer your question, go for it! You could totally write a good poem based off of this encounter/experience/thing. The only part I would change would be the ...

Hi there, I really love the cadence of this poem. It flows beautifully from one petition to the next. Also, the theme is vulnerable and soft and I love it. ...

Hi there! First off, I'd like to say that I love the tone of this piece. It's dark and thoughtful, just like the twilight it describes. Also, the images in ...

Hi there, I love how entertaining this piece is. I can totally relate to your near-death skiing experiences, as I've had a few myself, and I appreciate that you can ...

Hi there, I'm interested to see where this piece goes. Quick question: which historical era is it, or will that be answered later? I like the playfulness of this piece ...

Hi there, First off, this piece made me laugh. I don't know why, but I just thought it was so funny! So if that was your goal, good job! I ...

Hi there, At first, I didn't like how reflexive this piece was, meaning I didn't like how the narrator addresses himself and the audience. At the end, when I realized ...