electricbluemonkey

Great poem. Really good imagery, which gets the reader to really see and imagine whats going on. Oh yeah, but the long words...eek.

That was...disturbing.

That was...interesting. I dont really know if I like it or not. The rhyming seems a bit force, but its alright.

Although I didn't really agree with the points you made, this was pretty good. Impressive and expressive.

First of all...you're back! Secondly. That was well done. The choice of words you used were great, and it told a great short story.

Very, very detailed. Almost too detailed... But that was good. Interesting but confusing at the same time, and it didn't really make that much sense. It does just seem like ...

Hey, that *was* pretty good. It wasn't horrid, it was just pretty choppy. It would make a great short story, though.

Ha, that was good. It would work out so good as a song, way better than as just a poem. You know why I liked it? Because it was just ...

That was great. I liked the simpleness and shortness of it, and the descriptive words you used were good. I liked it a lot.

Hey, someone finally commented on this. Well, thanks everyone. And this is certainly not a report. It does teach you about some science stuff that we used to learned back ...

I sorta liked it. It was very unusual and interesting. The "sound effects" were really unique, and it was very good, and the meaning is easy to understand. All I ...

Whoa...can I try it? It sounds sooo good... But that was very interesting. Umm...it...made me curious.

Wow...thanks everyone...really. And Liz, you write way better than me! You're a very good writer! DONT GET YOURSELF DOWN LIKE THAT! Ooh, I haven't had the time to rewrite this. ...

... Already a thread about this. Hmm...

Because...its invisible? Hehe, that was long...but good, yeah, it was good. I liked it a lot. Took me a long time to read, but the humor made up for it. ...