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Re: The Darkness
The trees are lisntening and watching our every move. As we walk side by side into the dark. Well this paragraph went a little out of flow... This isn't bad ...
Jan 15, 2011 -
Re: Changes
It was good but could have been better... If you read it loud it seems very dull... It does not a good flow either... Keep writing and you will get ...
Jan 14, 2011 -
Re: pluto
Good showcase of your imaginations mate... Good piece i just loved it... It had good rhythm and a perfect flow... Keep writing... :) Pm me for anything... :D
Jan 14, 2011 -
Re: Wine On-Line
Well... It keeps me thinking for a while that was is this thing all about... I could not understand it... Then also it had a good flow but it went ...
Jan 14, 2011 -
Re: A remembrance of my friendship...
This is truly awesome... It touched my heart.... It invokes raw emotions... Its a very good piece with the true facts of life... Great rhyming and flow... I loved it.. ...
Jan 14, 2011 -
Re: Moscow Does Not Believe the Tears
Its a lovely piece... Like said above it invokes raw emotions... It was perfect... Flawless as much as i can see... I just loved it... Keep up the great work.. ...
Jan 14, 2011 -
Re: No answer :(
It is a good piece to read through... Great imagery.... Good flow throughout.... Keep writing... :) PM me for anything... :D
Jan 13, 2011 -
Re: Cold
It was a good piece but it lacked emotions.... Couldn't feel anything while i read along... It had a good flow but at some places it simply lost the flow... ...
Jan 13, 2011 -
Re: I Need Someone
Its a good piece... But it has got a lot of choruses compared to the main material.... You better work on the main a bit more... I'm really sorry for ...
Jan 13, 2011 -
Re: A Summer's Dream
It was a good piece.... Good use of vocabulary... But there was no flow in your piece... And you totally messed up the portion of vengeance.... You better redo it... ...
Jan 13, 2011 -
Re: Kindness Can Change A Life
BRAVO... A story well conveyed through your poem... Good rhythm and a good flow.... Keep up the good work... :) PM me for anything... :D
Jan 12, 2011 -
Re: Mother
Good one... It was good to read.... Great work with the rhyming.... Keep up the good work... :) PM me for anything... :D
Jan 12, 2011 -
Re: Together? No.
It was a good piece but i could not much get what was going on there.... Can you please elaborate?? Good use of words and nice imagery.... Keep up the ...
Jan 12, 2011 -
Re: Ephemeral Girl
Great one.... A story unfolded in a poem... Its very impressive how you created in on your phone.... How much time did it actually take you?? You better lengthen a ...
Jan 12, 2011 -
Re: The Hidden Treasure
A good story with every possible details and the beauty of each and every thing present there.... Keep writing... :) :D
Jan 11, 2011