I Need Someone

by Danicalifornia26

Published January 13, 2011

I wrote this after my dad was diagnosed with stomach cancer. I stare at this blank page
Not knowing what to say
Or express how I feel
I want to let it all out

All I know is that
My life feels like one giant bad dream
And as the tears fall
I try to find hope
Or a way to push through it all

Chorus:
But there is one thing I know
That I need someone
To stand by my side
To hold my hand
To just be there

Even if I can't explain what I feel
Or why I feel this way
I wish with a snap of my fingers
I could be me again
And not this person I'm not

I can wipe away the tears
Stand tall like nothing is wrong
But doesn't change the fact
That inside I am breaking

Chorus:
With all I can't explain
And all that I can hide
I need someone
To stand by my side
To hold my hand
And be there

I want to reach out
But I don't know what to say
I'm just trying to keep myself together
The string is becoming thin
And I am terrifed to break

Chorus:
I need someone
To stand by my side
To hold my hand
To be there

And maybe I will find the strength
To speak what cramps my head
And shed the tears
I'm afraid to show
To anyone other than you




Well there is my first post. Tell me what you think and if there is anything you would change.

Comments & reviews · 8
Danicalifornia26 commented Comment · Jun 10, 2011

thank you so much!!

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Chelsea4827
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Chelsea4827 commented Comment · Jun 9, 2011

I really liked this, it was full of emotion and I am so sorry for your news.

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jenmarie
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jenmarie commented Comment · Jun 9, 2011

i agree on their comments
your song was full of emotions..'
nice!

Danicalifornia26 commented Comment · Jun 9, 2011

I see what you guys are saying. What happed is I didn't seperate the verse and chorus very well. The chorus is only but there is one thing I know
That I need someone
To stand by my side
To hold my hand
To be there

Danicalifornia26 commented Comment · Jun 9, 2011

Thank you all for your comments. I know am getting back to you way late and I'm sorry. Just a lot has happened since I posted this. My dad did end up passing away. Thank you for advice and will keep it in mind.

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armstronge commented Comment · Jan 13, 2011

It's a great song. But there's a lot of chorus. You might want to add more, cause it can be a little boring if it's just the chorus.
There's lots of emotion in it. It's great! I hope your dad gets better. Keep writing!

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ehte92
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ehte92 wrote a review Review · Jan 13, 2011

Its a good piece...
But it has got a lot of choruses compared to the main material....
You better work on the main a bit more...
I'm really sorry for you dad....
Keep writing... :)
PM me for anything... :D

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Abi commented Comment · Jan 13, 2011

i really like this songas it expresses alot of emaotion and true feelings



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