To be honest, you should turn the wine part into it's own separate poem. It just doesn't fit with the bit about social networking (not that well, anyway). Well, it actually does fit, but the change from wine to social networking is...meh.
Also, one little nitpick:
"and it’s a mystery,
the number of times
a heart is wrecked
via
technology,"
The way the technology falls is just unnatural; I would suggest you make it on the same line as the "via".
Keep writing, and good luck!
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