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This is a bit cliche for my taste, but then again, everyone feels like this at one time or another... so I guess that's kind of expected out of love ...

Honestly.. I like most of this just the way it is. You didn't sound like you were trying to make this very complex, which is perfectly fine. For that reason ...

Again, interesting style. While this worked on your other piece, I'm not sure if it does with this one. I like that it adds a good rhythm to the poem, ...

This is indeed a neat little style you've got here. Given the proper subject, such as a Cyborg, this is very creative. Normally I wouldn't be inclined to say I ...

I don't want to cry because I can see it in your eye s that (no comma) you are happy without me. We are apart , We are away , ...

This tells a fantastic story.. you had me interested (especially with word choice), and usually I feel intimidated by poems of such length (not because I don't like length, but ...

The overall concept of the poem is good. I like the images you incorporate in the piece, and your word choice compliments the poem pretty well, though it does have ...

Heheh. I didn't quite understand the title until I reached the end of the poem - I like what you did, taking on the phrase "I feel golden" and incorporating ...

This leaves me wondering whether the narrator is actually getting along with the person he/she is speaking to. Is the narrator questioning the feelings of this person out of doubt, ...

Absolutely brilliant. I love this piece; your diction is perfect for the poem, your thoughts are clear, and it has a great flow to it. I think in some places ...

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Haha! Very clever. My first impression was something along the lines of "damn.. harsh." Once I got around to the end, though, I immediately recalled numerous times where I had ...

Overall I thought this was pretty good. The structure was a bit everywhere - in the future I suggest perhaps polishing your poems a bit before posting them? Again, it's ...

Overall I thought this had a good flow to it. If I may make a suggestion, perhaps lose some of the periods? You don't necessarily need them after every line, ...

This, to me, sounds like a discussion between two people from the viewpoint of one. One of them sounds a bit ignorant (ignorance is bliss), while the other (the speaker ...