dragonrider

I love your story. The first thing that caught me were your eye for details, and when the plot struck, it was amazing! I liked your ending, but I think ...

This was a decent short story. However, I think that there are a few places that you need to clear up. Mostly in the second paragraph, but some were spread ...

I thought that this is a very good prologue. It was well thought out and organized in a clear way. Also, it caught my attention from beginning to end (loved ...

Excellent piece. The only thing I would complain about is some of the grammar. Sometimes it would throw me off a little (but I got your message in the end). ...

I love your detail and fluency with words. The prologue isn't too short or too long or overwhelming or dragging at all. I am truly intrigued, and I have very ...

You had a weak beginning and watch out for choppy sentences and unnecessary paragraphs (watch out for your grammar). The sentences didn't really flow and the quotations aren't realistic--what 'real' ...

Your story is amazing. It caught my attention from the very first sentence, and is full of awesome descriptions. However, sometimes you can be just the tiniest bit overwhelming. It's ...

It was an interesting read, but honestly, you were a bit unfocused. You jumped from the library book, to someone being kicked out, and Shakespeare/Anne Frank. You need to sharpen ...

It was a pretty enjoyable read. Some grammar was off, you used "grey" one too many times, and it was a little unfocused. Excellent ending, which shows the conflict of ...

Interesting. However, I think you used too much swearing and plain words when you could have used more descriptive words. An ironic ending, considering the character, but I liked it. ...

Well done! A different style indeed, but very likable. I didn't really see anything that needed correcting except for that you might have wanted to separated the beginning and the ...

Yeah . . . definetely the spirit! I can honestly write that I have never read a poem that had tampons in it. Good job on being unique! I really ...

I really enjoyed this poem as well. What confused me though, was the last paragraphs. I like an aura of mystery myself, but this just seemed random. You're talking about ...

Your work is unfocused, there is terrible grammar, bland words, and it was hard to follow. Most of it didn't make any sense. You need more practice, trust me. It's ...

A little disappointing :( . . . While the poem flowed well 8) the sentences were random. :evil: While they stayed on beat, they didn't make any sense. :? :?: ...