dragonrider

Awesome poem...There isn't a whole lot to criticize. But I think that it would have been better if the poem was separated into separate stanzas so it'd be an easier ...

Excellent story! It was written very, very, very well! The beginning caught my attention right away, and kept my attention all the way to the end. There is very little ...

I enjoyed this piece. Good beginning, it grabbed my attention immediately. It could have been organized better--separate thoughts from narrating. Also, there were some words that weren't spaced out. "

This was a good piece. Although there were a few areas that need fixing... The intro. was very good, and it immediately caught my attention. I loved the descriptions, and ...

Thank you for sharing this story with me, but so sorry that it happens to be a true one. There is very little to criticize. It was organized really well, ...

This was a thoroughly interesting poem to read. Be careful with your apostraphes. Awnsers is supposed to be answers, but that might just be a typo. The topic itself is ...

Prologue: I felt that you had a weak beginning. I think that you were aiming for conversational...but it didn't come out well. "This is a story that could happen, to ...

I enjoyed was a good chapter. "There is never a dull day. Not a day I’ve seen. No matter how much we wish, our prayers are never answered. The most ...

Overall, I enjoyed your story...but there are some areas that could use some improving. First off, I felt that your beginning was a little weak. I think that there should ...

Lylas, this is a little confusing. I really like how the beat, the emotion, and the words flow together, but you're switching pretenses from his, her, and my that it's ...

The world is my life, Overall, this story was very confusing.... You didn't have a organizational system--there were no paragraphs or anything. Everything was written on one line, which is ...

Lylas, This was honestly, really good poetry. It was well-constructed and worded very well. The words and paragraphs flowed very well together and it was, VERY well done! The beginning ...

Probie234, I enjoyed your story. It had a straight-forward plot with interesting characters--especially the little girl. However, there are a few things that need improvement. While the story was fine

MysteryMinder, Your story idea has potential, but your execution was weak. First, your grammar was all over the place! It's hard to follow. You really need to fix that. Also, ...