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Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical first: "This room like a closed casket, I just a drowning soul in the darkness.", that comma should be ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "The one telling me she is about to scream,", delete the comma at the end of this line. You're ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical first: Well, the biggest thing that sticks out is that there are no lines in this poem. I understand ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Technical: I need punctuation throughout this entire poem. I can't read something with no road signs. Example: "Cloud sailboats Float ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Technical first: ""Who do humans think they are?" He asked. "To try and measure me."" The punctuation on that is ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: This poem needs some punctuation. For example, "Time is the thing that seems to pass us by even when ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Technical: "The battle is over, but another war has begun;" Now, a semi-colon is technically proper there, but it feels ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "I play for shadows And perform this clumsy dance In my box theater Of corrugated cardboard" That last line ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "What do you do once you’re eternally sleeping, And all the people you hated are silently weeping." You have ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "The flame is an untied rope, last words shouted, and diminished hope, a duckling that is now flightless, although ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day for the Rouge team! Technical: "and for a moment, it stays white", there should be a period at the end ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this glorious Review Day! Technical: "Her heart is tainted while her mind is impure." You could just say "and" instead of "while". While implies ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this wonderful Review Day! Technical: "But a life alone, is a life lost." If you want a comma in this line, then I'd suggest ...

Knight Dragon, here to review on this Review Day! Technical: "You hold promises and secrets, I just have to know more." You should have a period after the first line ...

Knight Dragon, here to review for this Review Day! Technical: "I'am a rover lost in darkness", do you want "I'm" or "I am"? Please fix that typo. "My weary heart ...