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Hello there Shiny! Dogs here with your review. If I may start with, WELCOME TO YWS! I hope that you enjoy your time here, if you ever need any help ...

Hello there Kayla, Dogs here with your review. I liked this piece, short and simple, although you use a bit of a cliche topic you do make it work for ...

Howdy Cailey! Just trying to bump up some points for team Red :P (WOOT WOOT) I thought this piece was cute and sweet. Although, I almost never advise this, but ...

Hello there Em! Dogs here with your review today. Ok, let me start with a WELCOME TO YWS! I hope you enjoy your time here, if you ever need any ...

"For all I know, I could already be dead, floating in the void of my conscious." Nice, I like this line. Brings in an excellent perspective to the piece. Well ...

Hello there Wind! Dogs here with your review. If I may first say congratulations on submitting your piece to the Poetry Contest! Just one more submission and I'll post the ...

"often included now" A little awkwardly worded. Maybe try saying something like: "often including now." I'm not sure why, but the "included" part of this sentence is throwing me off. ...

"I told him laughingly" I think "laughingly" is not quite the word you're looking for here because it means: "with amused ridicule or ludicrous inappropriateness." So either say "I told ...

"I looked down at the picture of me and him together taken a month before that dreadful day" Nice start, I like the subtle hint of foreshadow you use here. ...

"for the general to come and make his announcement" Nice start here, although I think you need to try to omit all useless words whenever you can. Try saying: "for ...

"brightest purple dress..." I get that you're really pushing the purple, but at this point it's a little too much. Keep the fact that it's purple and all but the ...

"It wasn't as if the house wasn't beautiful" This line bugs me a little bit, just because of the double "wasn't" so close to each other. Breaks the flow of ...

Hello there, Snoink! Tucker here with your review today. Just read the first chapter and loved it, let's see how you hold up with the next couple :). "a peeling ...

"I eased open the chain- linked door slowly" Howyd Kay! Dogs here with your review, really quick nit picky note here, grammatically this is fine as is, but it sounds ...

Hey there Pencil! Dogs here with your review. Let me just say congratulations on submitting to the poetry contest, I believe you are the last or the second to last ...