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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Something I Totally Drummed Up

    Hello I'm Vernon and I'll be your reviewer, and I've a question to ask 'Why so many question?' Because that's all this is constant questions, which aren't even looked at, ...

    Oct 1, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: This World

    Hello I'm Vernon and I'll be your reviewer. The way this poem jumps about is a big problem, it all connects, rather loosely, but there is issues, big issues. Let ...

    Oct 1, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Lovesick

    Hello, I'm Vernon and I'll be your reviewer. Please understand that though this will sound harsh. It's meant to improve you. So when reading my review, understand that. Let me ...

    Sep 15, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Age of Time

    Hands move smooth when face is young on the hour chimes are sung happy songs of play and race set the world an hourly pace The metronome shows seconds past ...

    Sep 15, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Mom

    Hello, I'm Vernon and I'll be your reviewer, I understand this is personal, but I seriously wish you hadn't post this on here, kept it for a blog or something, ...

    Sep 9, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Mistake (rated R)

    Hello I'm Vernon and I'll be your reviewer, now this didn't seem exactly like poetry, but nonetheless it does have poetic elements so agree with rap idea. Now, bit of ...

    Sep 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: A Cutter's Lullaby

    Okay, I'm Vernon and I'll be your reviewer. Now lets make it clear here, I don't like the theme of the poem, I don't like what's it's about. I'm not ...

    Sep 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Roses Have Wilted

    The roses have wilted since the last time I've been here. What were once bright, red petals alive with the days we lived, are now dried up remains, black as ...

    Sep 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Death of Promethius Jebediah Wulf III

    Okay, this was surreal, I'm normally harsh as hell, but utterly lost here, seem almost like a limirick that went on. This would actually go well with music, something you ...

    Sep 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: dont let him take you down

    The best of the best have sleepless nights They just can’t evade his grip so tight Every day as he passes by Many a men than say god bye He ...

    Sep 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Welcome to Auschwitz

    Children cry in the dead of night screaming for solace As their mothers try to tell them it’s alright as they are told to hush, be quiet The silence is ...

    Sep 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Space Inbetween

    I was thinking about changing this into lyrics, but it's in here because I don't know a good song composer/musician and I can't write music. Therefore it will stay a ...

    Aug 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Misguided Angel

    Rip it to shreds :) Misguided Angel She holds a mauve rose At the crest of her breast And stares out upon the calm, A blue captive ocean in his ...

    Aug 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A song for you

    Okay this is amazing, I've one tiny tiny suggestion though. This seems more like a ballad sorta deal, like it should have music with it. I could imagine ya strumming ...

    Aug 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A week

    Okay, I'm Vernon and I'll be reviewing this poem. Okay, firstly, lets begin by saying, layout is interestings makes me think of the poem for remembering days of the weeks ...

    Aug 29, 2009


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