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Hey Mars, I'll be nitpicky, if you want ^_^ I meet him on the battle field on a snowy day. My very first thought? Why is this not in the ...

Hey there, This is interesting - you manage to tell quite a story in very few words. Nitpicks have been taken care of by the reviewers that came before me, ...

Hey there, As the reviewer above me says: everything's been nitpicked through! Just wanted to let you know that it was an interesting read, and that I quite enjoyed it. ...

Welcome to YWS ! First of all; PM me about the things you don't understand. I'll do what I can to make things easier for you. Secondly; the YWS enforces ...

Ah ^_^ I like this piece a lot! I thought it was one of them complainy pieces of writing, but then it turned out to be quite different - which ...

Whoa. This is a lot to review at once. I've started reading, though - and I'm curious to see where it leads - so I'll review the first half now ...

Hey there, first of all: This is very short. Do you plan on making this longer or is it a stand-alone writing exercise of sorts? ^_^ I must say though, ...

Hey there, Let's get on with the review, shall we? I'd pointed this out and he told me he’d cut it chopping vegetables for dinner, but when did he ever ...

Hey there, here's your review: I leapt out of bed, and opened my door silently. Not to fond of the word "silently" in this sentence. Especially since you use the ...

Hey there, I'll be the first reviewer for ya ^^ First things first: It's very short. This cannot be the entire first chapter, can it? Do you mean it's a ...

Hey there, First off - I like the way you start your story with the quotes. Secondly... here's the review! *cheer* (Hehe, yes; I'm mildly overenthusiastic ^^ but I'm having ...

Hey there ^^ First things first: You should really decide on the title for your book yourself, dear. And... you say you don't mind them being cheesy; I'm certain you ...

Okay, so here's the review I promised. I hope it's useful. And please don’t *kill* me if I make comments you disagree with =P You and your guns... sheesh. The ...

Heya, Review time *cheer* Here we go: Daphne Nord C'est quoi ça ? [Excuse my French :wink:] Is this the name of the MC? The name of the story? Not ...

Muahahahahaha ! *shows no mercy* Nah, I'm kidding :wink: It was the year 1995 and the Inauguration of the new president was coming up. But my friends and I don't ...